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The Dual
Contributed by
girltranscended
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Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 05:15:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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There is a cavern deep within,
overrun by weeds and rotting boards
of abandoned dreams.
It is an obscure realm,
my lost, cryptic den. It
reeks of resentment,
spawns distaste,
deters visitors.
My secret weapon and
my downfall, growing steadily within,
unfolding it's arms like a long
drawn out story you've heard before.
What is a part of me, becomes
a struggling duality.
Good and evil,
right and wrong,
my future, my past.
It pushes me to succeed,
plans my escape,
waits maniacally for me to reach the end
of my allotted length of rope
doomed to fall.
How difficult it is to keep my demon at bay
on nights like this.
I am the horror movie in which the girl always falls,
strengthening the pace,
lengthening the race.
I am the victim, it's captor,
the torment, and it's rapture.
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Re: The Dual
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 05:39:43 PM AEST
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WOW....very deep and insightful!
You did a wonderful job with this! |
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Re: The Dual
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by Trippychick on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 10:23:15 AM AEST
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Wow- I really like this one...
I was down in my own "cavern" recently and it's not a nice place to live. Hooray for hope and moving on!!
Good job GT |
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Re: The Dual
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 10:44:22 AM AEST
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WOW!!!!!!!! (... that's three of 'em if your counting)
This is truly an incredible write. It reaches in deep and grabs at the core, you know?
strengthening the pace,
lengthening the race.
I am the victim, it's captor,
the torment, and it's rapture.
Incredible. Such an profound capturing of this moment in time. It's as if you caught time and place and thought and emotion in a trap and dumped it out here. Extremely well done!
I am so very glad I didn't miss this,
SNM |
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Re: The Dual
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 01:03:44 PM AEST
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This is a fantastic write, I truly enjoyed reading. Very nicely orchestrated.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: The Dual
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 01:20:29 PM AEST
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Wow...i love this, i agree with the others it really grips at you.
How difficult it is to keep my demon at bay
on nights like this.
I am the horror movie in which the girl always falls,
strengthening the pace,
lengthening the race.
I am the victim, it's captor,
the torment, and it's rapture.
I adore the end...
Great write!
Many hugs,
Phil xxx |
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Re: The Dual
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by avanottingham on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 07:11:26 AM AEST
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I actually had to read this twice before I really grasped it and could relate to it. Once it clicked I was hooked!
I have to say my favorite part was, like the others, the very last lines.
I am the victim, it's captor
the torment, and it's rapture.
Really powerful message, well executed! |
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Re: The Dual
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 07:51:16 AM AEST
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Everybody loves a rhyme, we know.
But I think these are the best lines of the piece -
"growing steadily within,
unfolding it's arms like a long
drawn out story you've heard before."
An excellent adventure. |
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