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Amber Heart
Contributed by
spike
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Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 07:51:09 AM in AEST
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In the forgotten amber,
Lying still in golden peace
Love waits, patiently, for release
Amber heart, resin hard
All those partners you discard
Once pure feelings, shrivelled black
The patient lover will coax them back.
Diamond eyes, facet gleam
In your passing suitors dream
So much pressure made you stone
A kindred soul will draw you home.
Golden skin, metal smooth
Rejecting all who try to soothe
Too much grasping made you bleed
A gentle touch is all you need.
Silver tongue, vocal shears
Reducing all to bitter tears
A Siren mute for far too long
A calming voice will draw your song.
All these things that you’ve become
Cruelty that has left you numb
Betrayal that has turned you cold
Your lotus soul can still unfold.
A coaxing gaze, a safer path
A proffered hand, a gentle laugh
A trusted guide to share the pain
Your amber heart will beat again.
Copyright ©
spike
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 08:26:21 AM AEST
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I am in awe. All that feeling and rhyme, too!
What incredible use of symbolism and double meaning. BRAVO to you!
Stitch |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:32:43 AM AEST
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Glad your walls are crumbling, and your heart gets a restart.
Very emotional, you painted a very clear picture and held my eyes to the end of your poem, leaving after images burn into the soul.
Awesome poem.
Take Care
Kindragon |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by darkplaidbabe on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:40:45 AM AEST
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this made me a little ashamed of myself. ive recently realized how hardened ive become, im hoping now to remedy that. great poem, it flows perfectly!
lovelovelovelove, Brynna |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 11:30:33 AM AEST
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That flows well enough for easy musical accompaniment. Has it been considered ? It a beautiful peice. Well written.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 05:00:30 PM AEST
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| lovely, in both form and resonance |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 03:15:39 PM AEST
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Ohhhh.... this is very, very good. It makes me feel like crawling inside of it and wrapping it around me like a warm blanket. It is very insightful, quite lovely, and... comforting somehow.
Very well constructed and very well thought out. Just beautiful!
SNM |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 01:26:04 PM AEST
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Amazing!
You have constructed a masterpirece here.
I plan to check out more of your works! |
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Re: Amber Heart
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd August 2006 @ 06:38:28 PM AEST
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S~
I have travelled back a bit, to pluck an earlier work in appreciation ..
and I am absolutely glad I did! How wonderful, this piece in all
it's insight, truth and beauty. I have to say in all honesty I wish I
had wrote this. It's stunningly brilliant and brilliantly stunning.
I simply ADORE how the last line in each stanza speaks of
hope eternal and is postively dripping with optimism.
Wonderful work, Spike, as always.
*really loves this one*
~Breezy |
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