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Dead All ALong
Contributed by
corrupted_minds
on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 04:28:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Darkest grave I call my home,
My house is full when I'm alone,
Silence fills the lonely halls,
You could drop a pin and hear it fall,
My minds corrupted, I dont think straight,
Cant run away from my lonely fate,
I once could speak, now not a word,
I'd try to talk, but never heard,
Black's my color, all dressed in lace,
Whites the color of my cold, pale face,
I've lived in hell for all my time,
Hell's better than this life of mine,
I've tried to die, but I always fail,
Now what to do? My lifes for sale,
I slit my wrists but never I bleed,
I prayed to God but I have no creed,
God did nothing cos God's a lie,
He left me here on my bed to die,
I cried for help my call wasn't answered,
So my cries were better left unsaid,
I've hung my neck, I've used a gun,
I've drank poison only for fun,
I've jumped a cliff, I've drowned at sea,
But I wake up the next morning still alive old me,
Now I'm tainted and scarred, ugly and chained,
On the sunniest days on me it's rained,
The nights are eternal, the sun does burn,
I'm waiting for death, I'm waiting my turn,
With my broken heart and and this lovely moon,
I still want my time to come soon,
I was un-dead I couldn't die,
All I could do was bleed and cry,
My lifes a record, a never ending song,
I couldn't die cos I was dead all along
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 05:46:25 AM AEST
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| this iz awesome, pure genius! keep up the good work, youve got true talent! |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by Dizza_13 on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 06:41:11 AM AEST
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awesome write loz
love always, dizza
xoxoxox |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by darkplaidbabe on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:29:12 AM AEST
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**speechless**............wow. It's like you captured the very essence of my soul in this poem!!!! i dont what to say.....just...wow.
lovelovelovelove, Brynna |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:59:18 AM AEST
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this was a very deep and moving write...
pixie xx |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 11:25:30 AM AEST
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incredible ~ never do you cease to amaze
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by willow_tara72002 on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 02:07:04 PM AEST
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| This was very good. I loved how you protrayed yourself as already dead, and im sorry you have had a hard life,. I hope it gets better. |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by Hakiokusaken on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 12:58:44 AM AEST
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Very good and awesome poem. I really loved it, plenty of emotion and you describe the feeling of hopelessness perfectly.
~HAKIOKUSAKEN~
P.S. Thanx for the comments on my poems they mean a lot coming from you. |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by deathdrop on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 06:42:18 AM AEST
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this hits me hard and grips to the inside of me.
it's such a heart-wrenching poem.
so dark, so morbid, so good!
i feel so much of your pain and the bits i don't feel i pick up in an instant from reading.
this tells me exactly what it's like to be you.
i love your work, you are very talented!
i'll read some more of your poems...
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by allymp on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 05:24:55 PM AEST
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WOW...this is a wonder peom...you've got great talent...and i know you prob don't wanna hear this but ....dont take your life away....i can tell you have a lot of talent...and plus...lifes to precious to give up....lots of love...
keep faith |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by catz77 on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 07:46:34 PM AEST
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| wow . . . . |
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Re: Dead All ALong
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by _smelly_oranges_ on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 05:08:08 AM AEST
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| this one is one of the best ive ever read |
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