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Who You're Meant To Be
Contributed by
mdmorash
on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 10:17:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
ChristianPoetry
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Touch the cloak of man;
Know the,
Diff’rence,
‘Tween him and his plan.
Trust not what you see;
Question,
All the,
Things that are not free.
Freedom is what’s longed;
Even,
At the,
Cost of all that’s wronged.
Can’t you see the signs;
Out there,
Pointing,
Through the clinging vines?
Stepping off the path;
Will bring,
Silence,
Buried in your wrath.
Back, you now must find;
So you,
Can leave,
All the pain behind.
Take his words as life;
I know,
You need,
Freedom from your strife.
And when you lose track;
He will,
Carry,
You upon his back.
Why live within pain;
So far,
Out there,
Lost from his domain?
Ask Him to forgive;
All your,
Sins and,
In His world you’ll live.
I can’t speak for you;
You must,
Stand and,
Speak so you’ll be new.
If you need a friend;
He’ll be,
With you,
‘Till the very end.
He won’t let you go;
He will,
hold you,
Up, and this I know.
He won’t let you fall;
If you,
Stumble,
He will hear your call.
Look there within you;
Don’t you,
Want to,
Breathe the air that’s true?
Speak the words with me;
Ask Him,
Hold Him,
Then true love you’ll see.
Bathe within His light;
Wash all,
The dirt,
Of sin from your sight.
Then what you will see;
In your,
Rebirth,
Who you’re meant to be.
© 2004
Michael David Morash
All rights reserved
Copyright ©
mdmorash
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2004-08-16 22:17:35]
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Re: Who You're Meant To Be
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 10:27:56 PM AEST
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| The words and sweeping verse of this poem are excellent. I also admire the subject. I am not one to talk here, but I do have one small criticism. Though this poem is terrific it flows a little too abruptly. If you are seeking punctuation I would lessen the breaks in each stanza. I would not overly punctuate. As a poem, however this acheives a huge amount of passion. It deserves to see reputatble publication, so I would work on the breaks. Other than that, excellent job! Great Write! |
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Re: Who You're Meant To Be
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 11:05:04 PM AEST
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Great write..... (watch those extra punctuation marks as last person advised..)
Jenni |
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Re: Who You're Meant To Be
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by mdmorash on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 11:27:05 PM AEST
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| Thank you both for reading and for the advice. |
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Re: Who You're Meant To Be
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by Solnubis on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 01:52:07 PM AEST
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| Good writing! |
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