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Shower Power!
Contributed by
Unaekseveer1
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Friday, 1st November 2002 @ 10:25:00 AM in AEST
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My best ideas come
Whilst under the shower,
Maybe cleaning oneself
Has inspirational power?
Thereon after drying
The rhymes I rehearse,
Repeating and jumbling them
Verse after verse.
Most often they're scribbled
By this dim bedside light,
Then sitting to my desk
Feeling now's time to write.
Although meant to be tucking
Oneself into bed,
Into Word97
Type the thoughts from my head.
It's here I stay sat
So my nest has to wait,
Little clock's in the corner
For reminding how late.
When just about finished
Time's become early morn,
Peeks the sun through my window
Again already dawn!
So then all of the verses
Get quickly run through,
Replacing me's and I's
When spotting more than two.
Arriving at the title
Is left until the end,
If done in the beginning
It's altered time and again.
Then connecting to the web
And Your-Poetry Dot Com,
Who forgot to sign out again!
Been logged in all along.
Never mind, it's off I go
To submit my rhyming plot,
Copy and Paste all the words
Into this verse melting pot.
Adding a little comment
Hopeful enticement for your read,
The trick is really knowing
What to write as ones plead.
Then it's one, two, three and four
Sometimes five final checks,
As spelling something wrong
Would in me cause a wreck!
The decision about topic
Is the hardest by far,
Usually ending by choosing
The most fitting avatar.
At the end of this all
It's sent with one click,
All the way around the world
Downunder to our Mick.
Now off back to home
To give others my read,
Where I'll find the best authors
Writing wonderfully indeed!
A while later this day
My poem magically appears,
The read total and comments rise
Your lovely words allay my fears.
Copyright ©
Unaekseveer1
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2002-11-01 10:25:00]
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Re: Shower Power!
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by OreO on
Friday, 1st November 2002 @ 02:03:29 PM AEST
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This is such a good write
It couldnt have been said better
than this, it's a wonderful
expression of this site,
this says it all
I enjoyed reading this alot
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 1st November 2002 @ 02:11:14 PM AEST
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This is good, Unaekseveer... That's about the size of it for lots of us....Keep up the great work...
Jenni |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 11:29:33 AM AEST
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Thanks for your kind words OreO,
I'm very pleased you enjoyed my write.
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 11:36:07 AM AEST
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Hi Jenni,
I had a hunch that I wouldn't be the only one who does it kinda like this!
Thankyou for for your kind comments on my writing.
With love
Dean;-) |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Rose on
Monday, 4th November 2002 @ 02:23:35 AM AEST
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Nice write, and well done in the way it was written. You got our thoughts in quite well. I know I do many things late at night or early morn, for my writes, depends on the inspiration that puts me there. Good write, and don't pack too much now.... Remember, the pc is the first thing you unpak first then you are all set up!! well for me, when I moved, the pc was the first thing set up..... hope you get all moved in safely by the end of the month.
always your friend,
AmberRose @}-->->-- |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Yellowrose on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 11:25:19 AM AEST
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| I enjoyed this piece of art that you have created with words. Keep up the good writing. From Yellowrose. |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 11:26:05 AM AEST
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Thankyou for your kind thoughts Amber,
They sure do mean very much to me indeed.
And it will be the first thing I set up!
With love
Dean;-) |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 11:31:11 AM AEST
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Thankyou Yellowrose,
I hope to be reading some of your writing soon!
And I wish you a warm welcome to the family of this site.
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by ShadowsCloud on
Thursday, 14th November 2002 @ 05:05:50 AM AEST
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This is a wonderful poem. I get my inspration pretty much the same way, but usually I am in bed trying to sleep. I have the worst insomnia because of it. I just can't go to sleep until I have everything in my head written down on paper. But you just can ignore it when the inspiration hits you.
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Thursday, 2nd January 2003 @ 10:04:20 PM AEST
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No you are right Candice and thankyou,
For me anyway it would be a crime to ignore inspiration as it's such a rare and beautiful gift to recieve in whatever form it appears!
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by ShadowsCloud on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 08:19:08 PM AEST
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Dean, Usually I have no problem with getting my inspiration. Except for the last month. I don't know what is wrong but I've not written anything in a month. I wish I knew what to do to fix this because I love to write but I haven't that the passion to do so.
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Debz on
Saturday, 26th April 2003 @ 07:44:46 PM AEST
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| Shower is often one of the few "alone times" alot of us have! I have a notepad & pen on my bedside cabinet as I work best late at night. You've captured it all in this poem! Although a little long, mine are also a little long (well, sometimes alot long, lol!) so.....who cares?! After all, they say it's quality that counts, not quantity, right? And this has quality! |
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Re: Shower Power!
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:27:14 PM AEST
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| You hit it head on. Yeah, I don't know what it is about showers, but I never have anything to write with in there. Gonna have to get bath crayons, LOL! Love the rhyme! Cheers! |
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