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roses are dead and I am too
Contributed by
MaRy_JaNe_420
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Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 01:35:05 PM in AEST
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roses are dead
I am blue
why can i stop thinking of you
i need your love like i need my drugs
i need your love like i need your hugs
i need your warmth i need your soul
i need your mind i need the whole
I wanna be in ur every thought
When you think of me i hope you get hot
I want to be wanted and needed by you
I think i love you and its true
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2004-08-14 13:35:05]
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Re: roses are dead and I am too
(User Rating: 1 )
by Stoney1 on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 03:24:23 PM AEST
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Self deprecation is such a bore.
If you care enough to take the trouble to write it,
then you should care enough to hope that the
world will find value in it.
Also, if you're not satisified with the finished product,
then possibly a little more polish would cause you to
like it.
As for the work itself, the main thing that comes across
is, "I need..."
I don't mean to sound harsh, but I have the feeling that
you're very young; much too young to sound so world-
weary and jaded.
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Re: roses are dead and I am too
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by Katie2008 on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 08:10:58 PM AEST
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I don't agree with the above comment, I loved this poem! Keep writing! I do agree with one thing though, don't be so hard on yourself about your poetry, just write what you feel. Great job!
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