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(the caves within my countenance)
Contributed by
SensitiveSoAbused
on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 11:56:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Out window
beyond glass
darkness stretches lengthly...
In window,
house, in place,
a homely glow
a flicker
within my brain
of blueish thoughts,
Red spikes, so linear,
so wanting to be out of place
and through this glass
death in dark and
lost (i am so)
Wanting.
...outside is icicle...
so cold but inside
so warm so why
am I shivering?
Take thy rudy lipstick from my neck,
and take thy nails out from my back!
(I cannot and I will not)
Now in charcoal dark,
alone, concealed
here i huddle, see me
shudder and shiver,
tears and terror,
(anguish)
...see the caves within my countenance...
Copyright ©
SensitiveSoAbused
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2004-08-13 11:56:00]
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Re: (the caves within my countenance)
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by Luinil on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 12:01:19 PM AEST
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| wow! an incredible peace of work...* |
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Re: (the caves within my countenance)
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 12:21:35 PM AEST
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That is incredible. Well written, easy read, and OH what pictures !!. 5 stars from Me !!! Thank you for sharing your imagery !!!
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Re: (the caves within my countenance)
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by BrandySwanson on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 12:30:27 PM AEST
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this was so incredible very nicely written good job.
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Re: (the caves within my countenance)
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by Icequeen on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 11:08:30 AM AEST
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Bloody excellent! The line:
'Take thy ruddy lipstick from my neck,
And take thy nails out from my back!'
Really reminds me of The Raven by Edgar Allan Poe, did you mean it to? Still whether you did or not, great work!
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