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The Mirror
Contributed by
WestCPunk
on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:26:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Look in the mirror
What do you see
I see me
Suffering from anxiety
Tingling flesh
A painful touch
A mind-blowing sting
A liquid rush
Sore bloodshot eyes
Heavy sighs
A mean stare
Quite rare
Not to be forgiven
For the acts you've committed
I wonder where my life went wrong
So as this mirror breaks down
My every mistake
I'll continue to walk down this road
As if everythings ok!
Copyright ©
WestCPunk
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2004-08-12 23:26:21]
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Re: The Mirror
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by shorty_52 on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:54:21 PM AEST
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this is really good. the rhythim went off a couple times but it is really good. i like the idea, but if this is true. then i am very sorry that u feel this way. if u ever want to talk i am here to talk. keep up the good work.
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Re: The Mirror
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 06:48:15 AM AEST
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Mirrors don't need rhythm, and I don't think that this wasn't set out to rhyme in every department. I don't think your mirror could reflect this poem as a mistake, either - its clearly expressed and seems like an honest relfection.
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