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I Have Expired
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
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Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 02:34:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I have expired,
Feeling older than I should.
As if The War itself tore into the quick,
Leaving an empty building of myself.
The memories linger in the grass,
And dance in dark halls.
The worst part,
Was losing what I had to give.
Not so much the love,
But the pain.
It's easy to fall in love.
The hardest part is hurting those,
The ones we expect to love.
You knock on the door,
But the house is pitch black.
The last shred of me left with her.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2004-08-12 02:34:09]
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Re: I Have Expired
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by dartsofplsre87 on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 04:07:28 AM AEST
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| Great poem. |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 04:26:40 PM AEST
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This is such a deep write....
Well done...
Jenni |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by Archie on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 02:07:04 AM AEST
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| You expressed your heart well here; it is always hard to move on when you love some one. |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 11:49:28 PM AEST
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Ow. Sacrificing so much for someone you love and then losing it all can never be easy. You've described the feeling well here.
~Ave |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 10:03:35 PM AEST
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all I have to say is "BEAUTIFUL" I enjoyed this one very heart wrenching but still a good write...I know how you feel though...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by AnastasiaN on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 01:46:20 PM AEST
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| this is really touching and makes me sad about my own heart. making the right decision is hard when you love someone with every bit of yourself. we always tend to hold onto things the tightest when we are forced to let them go. |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by xafflictedx on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 09:21:44 PM AEST
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| Don't feel to bad. Things will look up in the future. |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 03:45:43 PM AEST
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This is wonderful stuff.
I hope more people will
check it out
today.
--Mothy |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 05:53:33 PM AEST
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I like this! I love the title and the ending particularly struck me. This one leaves me thinking... and... that's just the way I like it. Well done.
Left sighing,
SNM |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 08:22:54 PM AEST
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| Love is evil! But I'm glad that you still have something left to give hun. Otherwise I'd be pretty lonely right about now. :p |
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Re: I Have Expired
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 12th October 2014 @ 11:21:53 AM AEST
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Beautiful. Haunting, in its entirety. This:
As if The War itself tore into the quick
Ouch.
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