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Lips Like Pastel Pink
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
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Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 02:00:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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There are peices of me
That were left behind,
And I'm to afraid too face you
To gather my thoughts again.
So I'm left here
Half forgotten in my fingerprints.
The ink fills my veins,
Like oxygen filling my lungs,
Burning it's way thru.
You've killed pieces of me,
The pieces of me I loved,
Now they exist as paper scraps
Burning in your hands.
But I found my love in her cerulean eyes,
And her lips like pastel pink.
I hope the moon never sets
to reveal the truth in my cowardice.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2004-08-10 02:00:42]
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by kammie on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 01:44:20 PM AEST
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nice write :) your not a coward i actually think your brave :)
kammie xx |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by TaintedOptomist on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 08:11:54 PM AEST
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| good use of imagery |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by TaintedOptomist on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 08:11:55 PM AEST
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| good use of imagery |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by grip-wth-broken-fingers on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 02:18:02 PM AEST
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| nice use of words god flow xgripx |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by Ethereal_Engine on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 06:07:58 PM AEST
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| Sad...but amazing wriing none-the-less, but u know pieces of your-self can always be fixed because u made them to begin with...it may take time and patience but eventually u can become what u were before and mabye better then ever. |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 10:24:36 PM AEST
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wow I liked this a lot....please never let down your pen...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: Lips Like Pastel Pink
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 08:29:02 PM AEST
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It stumbled in the beginning for me, with a couple of painful typos, but it's still better than anything I wrote 10 years ago. In fact, it's pretty incredible. Very rich in detail, with great lines.
~Scorp |
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