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Contributed by
Fluffhead
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Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 12:55:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I scream and cry
But you can't hear
All my pain and fear
I live in a world of darkness
Surrounded by a world of hate
Giving up is all I want
Its all I can take
Its cold and dark
In the void that was my heart
I'm and angel without wings
As I cry mt tears
Help is all I need
As I bear my pain
Help is all I want
As I sit alone in my fears
Help is all but what I can't have
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Fluffhead
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2004-08-10 00:55:07]
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Re: Help
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 02:03:24 AM AEST
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| this is a good write, just don't let one emotion consume you. it seems alot of people are dealing with depression on this site. still it was a good write.peace and love |
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Re: Help
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 04:17:49 AM AEST
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I don't want to undermine your pain, but I feel you could have surrounded your world of darkness with with a sky of hate, to make it sound better. Just a suggestion though - hang in there - help will surely arrive someday.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Help
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 06:01:39 AM AEST
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So much pain tattooed within your every word, a few more emotions in this poem, and I'd drown in my own tears, But it is still a master piece in its own right.
I wonder though is the cry for help real imaginative?Well either way message me if you need to talk, or not it is up to you. |
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Re: Help
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by NoahsARK on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 03:33:06 PM AEST
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This is a very good write, and as everyone said alot of emothion. But please keep writting I would love to read more of your poems.
Anita |
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