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Feature
Contributed by
Daniel
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Wednesday, 30th October 2002 @ 09:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
SongLyrics
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quarter phone...
which way do i run to go home?
forget i said anything...
you say i'll be better and i can say nothing in turn...
turn...
hide the phone...
this life i breathe is one i don't know
such a grande opportunity...
a whispered word so absurd might start to get through to me
roll the tape and film the feature
carry the theme well on out of hand
roll the tape and film the feature...
quarter phone...
why do i again get this empty dial tone?
go home do something...
i know you mean well but there's nothing you can change...
change...
hide the phone...
this day goes again and grows too old
what horizon is there to see...
a whimful word that isn't heard won't start to get into me
roll the tape and film the feature
carry the theme well on into hand
roll the tape and film the feature...
***
(10/29/02)
Copyright ©
Daniel
... [
2002-10-30 21:00:00]
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Re: Feature
(User Rating: 1 )
by OreO on
Wednesday, 30th October 2002 @ 10:32:25 PM AEST
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This is different
I like it alot, Great write
Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::. |
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Re: Feature
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by norticus on
Thursday, 31st October 2002 @ 12:51:46 AM AEST
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| Great theme, great tempo, great poem. It reminds me of the voice in my own head stuttering with thoughts to the tune of the wind or something. I give this a 4.721 on the Nortiscale |
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Re: Feature
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by Daniel on
Thursday, 31st October 2002 @ 02:31:02 AM AEST
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| hmm... i can't ever rememeber getting a score so high, is that a good thing norticus?? |
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Re: Feature
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by stephy on
Thursday, 31st October 2002 @ 02:42:46 AM AEST
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| like i told you, it's obviously not a happy write... it's got underlying tones of confusion and dissillusionment. it's very well written however. i like how it all flows together. any music to it yet? |
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