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I Wish...
Contributed by
theraven
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Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 12:54:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Woke up last night in between your yells
You two always screaming makes me so mad
Wish I had something besides myself to hit
Mom’s ranting rings inside my skull
Waves splitting against the cliff, that’s Dad
One of you will fall, over the edge and into the pit
My mind is throbbing, I just want to yell
You two, making my brother and sister so sad
Deserve to be punished, deserve to be hit
Always threatening me, never mean what you yell
Yet the words still pierce, like a cry in the pitch black
Wish I had something beside myself to hit
Put that piece away, I know you couldn’t kill
Me, but do it if it’ll make you glad
Anything to make you guys quit
Gentle crying, popping of pills
In the darkness; I wish I had
The power to help, to love, to forgive
I wish I had something besides myself to hit
The Raven
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Re: I Wish...
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by zenmind on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:00:51 AM AEST
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I love the way you told this story. It was sad, but powerful, and very descriptive. You had a couple of lines in their that hit home for me.
I wish I had
The power to help, to love, to forgive
I wish I had something besides myself to hit
Great job
Be True,
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Re: I Wish...
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 10:53:43 AM AEST
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Reading your poetry was like taking a trip into a Batman movie. Getting a VIP tour of the alleyways and rooftops of Gotham City, a place where even in the darkness, beauty can still be found. But the tour guide has control and shows only that which is deemed worthy (?) or personally of intrest at the time. I thank you for the tour and eagerly anticipate my next visit. Write On !!!
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Re: I Wish...
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by PRECIOUSBECKY on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 02:40:07 PM AEST
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| THIS IS SO SAD- AND SO BEAUTIFUL- I CRIED- THE YELLING ALSO ECHOES IN MY EARS . |
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Re: I Wish...
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by silverjade on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 07:41:27 PM AEST
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| i like this poem its sad and true in a lot of cases, i can relate to some lines, its really good and powerful |
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