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???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
Contributed by
Oriana
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Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 07:42:32 PM in AEST
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My imagination is driving me insane.
Causing me to want to scream like the hounds of hell
but lift my voice up like angels singing.
This burning need to die and live is consuming me all at once
Splitting my mind into two separate people.
One is calm full of hope for the world a picture of purity a princess of light and grace. A bright star in a universe of blackness and unknowing
The other dark as the deepest depth of the ocean not caring or feeling with thoughts that would make the Devil himself cringe at the mere mention of them. A cold lady holding the worlds deepest fears inside herself
Both struggle for power inside me wanting to make the world their own using me as their vessel for either destruction or peace.
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Oriana
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by Katie2008 on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 07:51:14 PM AEST
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ohh, I like this! This is pretty good for just sitting down and writing randomly. Very well wtitten, Maybe the title could be something like, "My Black and White World?" I don't know, but I definitely like your poem! Take care.
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by TheBlackVoid on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:29:08 AM AEST
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Ironicly i think Katie has a good choice for the title..and this was quite a write to just be writing.. i loved it. good work
Alucia, |
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by lonelywolf04 on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 03:52:04 AM AEST
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| i would say call it "split" or what katie said its good too and good kind of crazy write i liked it |
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:06:39 AM AEST
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How about .... Duality ... ?
Sometimes the best write comes from just letting go and allowing the words to direct you as to where they fit. Very nicely done.
Naz ~ |
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by inoc on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:10:56 AM AEST
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Yes what Katie said is a great title!!!!
I loved it
try another one ....
we'll read it again and again |
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Re: ???????????????? (title suggestions and comments please)
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by SWCSuzyQ on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 08:11:37 PM AEST
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Very good. Nicely said and written. How about a combo of the suggestions.
"Darkness & Light Duality"
Whatever you decide keep writing.
Suzy |
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