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Eden's Angel
Contributed by
Quiet_Waters
on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 06:17:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Angel of the realm of Eden
Crown of flowers, feathered wings
In a garden filled with roses
Watchful eyes see many things
Tiny butterflies surround her
One sits in her gentle hand
Mother nature's only child
Has this world at her command.
Bare feet grace the cobblestones
As she walks the maze of paths
Free from every earthly worry
Virgin still to human wraths
Song birds land upon her shoulders
Sing to her their serenade
And she finds the gardens center
Where miracles and dreams are made.
She lays down beside a fountain
Closes eyes in restful sleep
And sees visions in her mind
Of the memories she'll keep
Sunset colors over mountains
Sunrise on the open sea
Angel of the realm of Eden
Please come share your world with me.
QW 2004
Copyright ©
Quiet_Waters
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2004-08-08 18:17:09]
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by Jaylynne on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 06:29:43 PM AEST
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great read, I loved it,
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 06:45:41 PM AEST
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This is so very lovely. Quite ethereal in fact. You paint your images well in words. I will be watching for more of your work.
Smiles
Rita |
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by Oriana on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 07:50:58 PM AEST
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| *gasp* This is awsome. I agree with what Rita said you do paint a picture with words. Please write more like these....Please.. .. Oriana |
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:44:22 PM AEST
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What a wonderful first post! This is a beautiful write - I enjoyed it! You have a terrific poetric voice - I am so happy that you've brought it to YPDC so that we may enjoy it as well. This piece has terrific flow... and, as the others have pointed out, very strong imagery. And... I'll confess it... part of me wished I were more like the subject of this poem... It would be lovely, I think, to be free from worry or to have escaped some of the pain along the way as you describe here:
Bare feet grace the cobblestones
As she walks the maze of paths
Free from every earthly worry
Virgin still to human wraths
Impressed and interested (please keep posting!),
SNM
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:44:35 PM AEST
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Wow! That's some first submission. Beautiful piece. Keep it up, and welcome to YPDC!
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by arden on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:56:33 PM AEST
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this was so beautiful.
just amazing. i was awe struck from start to end.
i loved this.
cant wait to see more of your works
5 stars
Arden |
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by TheBlackVoid on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:52:53 AM AEST
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Omg! just wow! i agree with everything all the others have said..great first submit and great imagniation.. welcome to YPDC! and i cant wait to see more of ur writng! i really got into that.. i tried to picture myself there..how amazing it would be if fantsies were real eh? well again wonderful write! :)
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 01:24:18 PM AEST
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Great write....i liked it alot...awesome job...keep writing!!
Lots of Love
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Re: Eden's Angel
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 11:39:06 AM AEST
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truely beautiful........ hugs n' love nessa
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