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The Man On The Moon
Contributed by
wachumiri
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Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 06:03:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The man on the moon
I saw today
He taught me the words
I ought to say
Words of beauty
Love and grace
But I can't say them
To your face
To the sound of your voice
And the look in your eyes
I compare these words
And they suddenly die
There are no words
To describe you, Love
But for the tongue
Of the angels above
That language I
Have yet to learn
And 'till that day
My heart must burn
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2004-08-08 18:03:45]
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Re: The Man On The Moon
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by tlhInganHom on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 06:15:50 PM AEST
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OOooOoOoo! I love this! :-)
The only suggestion I might make is that it could use a stronger ending. What a wonderful subject, though! |
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Re: The Man On The Moon
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by TheBlackVoid on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 02:07:59 AM AEST
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I agree with the other person..but great write:)
Alucia, |
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Re: The Man On The Moon
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 01:15:57 AM AEST
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Rather cool piece, cousin. Save you "aught" to have written ought. As I suppose you've noticed. That, or you're an illiterate hooligan. Hmm. Could be that...
Anyway, so long.
Andrew |
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Re: The Man On The Moon
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:52:42 PM AEST
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Wow, such compliments. Am I really that astounding! Crazy things love does to you. Beautifully written, David. I love you.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: The Man On The Moon
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 02:26:44 PM AEST
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I don't find the ending to be lacking at all. Beautiful love poem, as usual.
Good Job
Ann |
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