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to infinite.
Contributed by
SensitiveSoAbused
on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 12:49:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Under oaken tree
she sits (legs crossed)
and she waits (eyes closed)
Leaves will fall upon her neck...
New York, why when she sits in
Central Park, the center of
Yellow taxis and
you are dying and
this young fawn is pregnant, kicked
from house, home; or that
boy or man is drugged but you don't care and
Under oaken tree
she sits (legs crossed)
and she waits (eyes closed)
Rain will fall upon her back...
Noise loud, you hear?
with violent ear
and pain is drowned
by the noise of the ice cream truck...
...Dee Dee, Da Da...
...De Dum, Da Da...
Or the !snap! of fingers or
of neck, of bone, of breaking
down and (sob and tears)...
and you don't care
and
Under oaken tree
she sits (legs crossed)
and she waits (eyes closed)
The grass is blue
and sky is green and
to hear nothing, see
nothing now she
wants and waits
to infinite.
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SensitiveSoAbused
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by tlhInganHom on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 12:53:33 AM AEST (User
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I can honestly say that this is the best poem I've seen on this site thus far. It is quite beautiful and I throughly enjoyed it! :-) |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by RavenShadows on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 01:03:34 AM AEST (User
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This is very well written. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by DrFunkyMunky on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 01:59:16 AM AEST (User
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Hey Lane, another great poem, I enjoy all of them always. They are always fun to read. Keep up the good work man, your doing great. Your going to be a pro one day man, haha, from what I have read of your poems you are a pro :O...see ya soon man, your bud
Nick (Guy) |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 02:42:48 AM AEST (User
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There's a lot of depth here, I love the gentle, thought-provoking imagery here. Well done. |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by thumper on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:55:13 AM AEST (User
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Very deep. Thought provoking. I appreciated the way you intertwined all the different ideas. Excellent poem.
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 10:27:10 AM AEST (User
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Hey, i'm probably the last person you want to speak to, but i love this poem and i must say it is my favourite of yours.
I'll email you soon, if you dont hate me (yeah, i kinda need to know that....)
Great poem.
*hugs* Phil |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by n2dep2care on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 12:01:02 PM AEST (User
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BRILLIANT!
clap!...clap....clap!
Laurie |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 03:30:37 PM AEST (User
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Read via the SP mention, I'm sure it deserves it. I especially liked the atmosphere engendered with the Ice cream truck's sound.
Well written. |
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Re: to infinite.
(User Rating: 1 ) by evilfairy on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:57:57 PM AEST (User
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utterly fantastic!!! |
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