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I couldn't see
Contributed by
Hakiokusaken
on
Saturday, 7th August 2004 @ 04:50:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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One day my life was stirred
I couldn't see
My vision ever blurred
I couldn't see
My heart was hard as stone
It wouldn't bleed
A woman's voice so sweet
yet I couldn't see
Until my heart was broken
It began to bleed
It hurt, yet her token
Just then I could see.
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Hakiokusaken
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2004-08-07 16:50:00]
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Re: I couldn't see
(User Rating: 1 )
by Hakiokusaken on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 07:10:38 PM AEST
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| I guess it wasn't as good as I thought it was. Im sorry you had to read that. and if Im judging too early please tell me I like comments or constructive criticism. |
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Re: I couldn't see
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by corrupted_minds on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 06:06:57 AM AEST
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Good Write. Keep it up
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