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Chocolate Egg
Contributed by
Jackman
on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 11:07:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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your eyes are static
they seem to see through mine
but i know they cannot
for i have depth
for i have soul
for i have more than you can know within me.
surface skimmer,
you see my flesh
but naught more.
how could you?
you lack the capacity my vacant love.
as empty as a chocolate egg
sweet and devoid of substance.
a pretty shell housing an empty space.
so keep on gazing into me
for there is nothing there which you could see
your big brown eyes
simply cannot disguise
the emptiness inside.
Copyright ©
Jackman
... [
2004-08-03 23:07:02]
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Re: Chocolate Egg
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 03:12:56 AM AEST
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Good metaphor. I would have liked to have known why your love is so empty inside - and why you believe you're less empty than they, but perhaps this is the subject of another poem by you I haven't read yet.
Thanks for writing something worth reading. |
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Re: Chocolate Egg
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 10:42:17 PM AEST
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| i agree with neps. so much poetry on this site not worth reading, im glad this wasnt one of them. |
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