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One Million Miles
Contributed by
jenny21614
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Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 07:40:04 AM in AEST
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One million miles.
Thats how far I'd walk,
to take the pain away,
to replace the piece of the puzzle thats forever missing.
To replace the piece of my heart, that stopped beating the moment it happened.
I'd walk a million miles to take the poisonous visions out of my mind.
Out of my heart.
One million and two rainbow colored flowers,
its ironic, to place them by a casket.
A casket that held a once breathing, feeling, soul.
A casket that's single fate was to be set ablaze with reds and oranges,
and set underneath six feet of dirt.
The lid of the casket had been left open,
its ironic to walk by a dead body that once had a beating heart, and a beautiful mind.
To walk by and take a look, overtime you close your eyes; you're left with that picture.
Its just a coffin.
So why can't you seem to get the nerve to walk over there?
He was your brother, everyone says he looks so healthy.
Healthier and nicer than hes looked in the past year and a half.
You picked out his clothes; his favorite jersey.
Your feet are taking you towards the coffin, boardered with the rainbow of flowers.
Your mind panics,
your feet stop.
You turn around, away from the one million and two flowers.
Away from the coffin...
With nothing but one million miles on your mind.
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jenny21614
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2004-08-03 07:40:04]
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Re: One Million Miles
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by lovespoetic0518 on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 08:13:23 AM AEST
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Breathtaking poem.....Heartwrenching event. I am so sorry for your loss. But time will heal all pain. This poem is magnificant. you are a beautiful writer.....
Kimberly :) |
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Re: One Million Miles
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by Sagacious on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 09:02:38 AM AEST
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Yours is a touching memorial which never asks the reader to feel sorry for you, but merely invites one to walk a while with you through that pain. The transition from one million miles, as a measure of distance, to the image of "one million and two rainbow colored flowers" lends immediacy to your work. It is as though we are at the funeral with you, feeling that loss and looking into the casket, knowing that the person inside it is no longer the human being we knew.
Your brother is fortunate, though, for he has you to keep alive the memory of what he was. So long as that's true, he will continue to resonate with beauty and vitality. You have done him a great service--and your readers, too. With thanks for your courage, -KAC- |
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Re: One Million Miles
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by MomentInTime on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 09:49:36 AM AEST
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I was touched by your words. Thank you.
Jordan OxO |
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Re: One Million Miles
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by Icequeen on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 10:08:00 AM AEST
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| Simply beautiful, I won't tell you the pain will ease, it won't but you'll become used to it sort of... I wish you peace. |
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