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liquid death
Contributed by
deadbloodyrose
on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 06:41:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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tears flow out of my eyes mixing with the clean water
bubbles relaxing my body calming my worried mind
razor blade falls from above slicing my lower leg
bright chrimson drips out of the tiny opening
clear sparkly water now tainted with a rich cinnabar
watch intently as the beautiful blood escapes my body
drop after drop dyes the water a deep vibrant red
feeling of liquid flowing out brings me so much peace
grasp the razor in my right hand and sqeeze it tightly
blade digs into my smooth skin opening up my palm
more sweet color mixes into the liquid that i lay in
repeatdly i slide the sharp object over my stomach
body part i hate the most that brings me so much anger
away at it i slash taking out all my built up rage
the blade falls out my hand and plummets to the bottom
my arm grows weary and i let it hang down at my side
the water level rises and pours into my open mouth
chokin on liquid i make no attempt at saving myself
water seeps inside me and brings me to my liquid death
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Re: liquid death
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by Katie2008 on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 06:49:50 PM AEST
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This is a very well written poem that many people can relate to. I wish you the best of luck!
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Re: liquid death
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by badboyzlover on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 06:58:53 PM AEST
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| wow that is really deep. It kinda reminds me of my friend only she didnt die yet. |
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Re: liquid death
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by kyletycz on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 09:37:24 PM AEST
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| good imagry, i liked the ability you had to create the picture and feeling oh so well.... best of luck my friend..... |
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Re: liquid death
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by frozenfire on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 10:47:39 PM AEST
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| wow..awesome imagery. I felt like I was right there with you! |
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Re: liquid death
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by RhythmBndt on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 07:46:11 PM AEST
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| A very well written write :) |
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Re: liquid death
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 08:19:47 PM AEST
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Great poem...excellent job
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: liquid death
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by Vermillion on
Saturday, 7th August 2004 @ 09:09:28 PM AEST
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that was truely deep and gripping.i felt as tho i was there standing over you wanting to stop you. amazing write.keep up the brilliant work
~vermillion~ |
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