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Bleed
Contributed by
dizza_13
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Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:28:39 AM in AEST
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Looking at the life I once had,
And the life that will come,
All that’s the same is the hate for myself,
All that I feel is the pain I inject.
Blood runs down my arm,
I finally feel free.
The razorblade shines bright tonight,
My blood awakens to the dark,
Veins are pulsing through my skin,
The future doesn’t seem so dim.
Blood runs down my arm,
I finally feel free.
My wrath of self-destruction,
The hate amongst my heart,
This force of pain and darkness,
I have to let it out,
I can’t control it anymore.
I cut and cut and cut again,
The pain runs free,
My wounds are open wide,
The freezing wind blows inside
It feels like ice.
Now I’m going to go,
To the very low,
And bleed my troubles away.
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Re: Bleed
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by Row on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:35:55 AM AEST
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| hey pretty good diz, cept i couldnt finish readin cos quite seriously all that blood and stuff was makin me feel faint |
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Re: Bleed
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:41:56 AM AEST
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a grim harsh way to go, but in alot of realitys its happening, I hope it isn't what u have decided to do.
This poem was well writtien, so dark, and the imagery was very gripping, you created a picture that held me to the end, well done.
you are talented writer it would be a shame to see that wasted...
Take care
Kindredblood_DRagon
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Re: Bleed
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by corrupted_minds on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:55:17 AM AEST
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Hey Hun,
Good write the writes are going well. Deep and meaningful. You got the whole feeling acorss. I know just how you feel. If you need to talk just holler. I'm here for ya.
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Re: Bleed
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by WestCPunk on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 03:54:08 PM AEST
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this was pretty good and it seems as if me and you are a lil bit alike cuz i used to do that a lot but not anymore cuz i figured out that it doesn't help and once i got better in poetry thats what i use to get my feelings across to everyone and myself. I hope you soon get better and realize the same things i did!
Much love,
Shelbi |
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Re: Bleed
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:27:51 PM AEST
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hello,
this is so sad,great poem tho.if you're really doing this,stop please,it won't help at all,soon you'll see a brighter day.my best friend can identify with this,i've stopped him from killing himself,even though he's done it all his life,and i don't know what i'd do without him,i'm helping him out right now and i'm being there for him.so please take care and think of the pain you're causing others,or to ME,as weird as it sounds,i just hate to see people in pain.so hugs and kisses.
love always,
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Re: Bleed
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by cj_ranson on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 01:29:33 AM AEST
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good writitng, but i meen reely, u r quite sad, sometimes people have to see the big picture, thats not the way too go. well now every1s gonna hate me coz every1 on this site is like that
good writing though
cj |
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Re: Bleed
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by Gothik_Twitch on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 03:17:09 AM AEST
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Well reading that helped me just cut and get it over with
i had tryed an icecube to numb my f*ing pain but i couldtn be free till i saw me bleed. i like it. i realate though |
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Re: Bleed
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 08:28:35 PM AEST
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Great write...i cant relate soo well...excellent job...
Lots of Love
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