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The Memory of Death
Contributed by
forever_lonely
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Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 07:34:16 PM in AEST
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Deep within the catacombs of stolen lifes lament
A fortitude of deaths regret upon one shall repent
Between the subtle natured ways and forcing from ones years
The reaper calls our deepest sins in shards of crystal tears
Broken into numbers lost, reflective of ones plight
A tear to call a priceless time, a memory of sight
Each shard a dream of shattered will, forgotten for ones right
When silent thoughts of memories lost, disperse within a bite
As open tears of contrite dreams emerge from Hades realm
Where rivers true of crimson blood consume and overwhelm
This quandary of immortal thought, an extrication of my mind
Bestow upon my shattered soul, a life and death combined
This image of eternal rest, though mirrors made of lies
A silhouette of final thought, from which we all arise
Fragments of our tears remain, as shattered crystal cries
Watching as the memory of my death now dies
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 08:12:34 PM AEST
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what an amazingly awesome write, luke, i really love this line: "A silhouette of final thought, from which we all arise" :) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by co_cane13 on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 10:16:00 PM AEST
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| it gave me chills and the line: the reaper calls our deepest sins in shards of crystal tears, wow, this poem is so vivid. great job |
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by venkat on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 01:49:16 AM AEST
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| Great imagery..awesome and astounding .:-) venkat |
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by pixie on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 08:48:10 AM AEST
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wow, great imaginery and thought put into this poem, a truly great, dark write,
pixie xx |
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 06:27:46 AM AEST
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| In the last stanza that should be 'through' not 'though' i did put through as i checked it multiple times but i guess that ruins the whole thing |
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 07:55:25 AM AEST
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Luke, you can go PM Mick if the typo bothers you that much. Personally, I didn't notice it that much, as the entireity of this one overwhelmed any innocent typographical error. I mean -
"As open tears of contrite dreams emerge from Hades realm "
Excellently written and rhymed. As usual.
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Re: The Memory of Death
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 09:12:58 AM AEST
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This quandary of immortal thought, an extrication of my mind
Bestow upon my shattered soul, a life and death combined
Wow.
I agree with Neptune... this entire piece is so well contructed, so wonderfully rhymed.... It is though, what's behind it that blows me away. This is the work of a poet AND a philosopher. Incredibly well done! I am seriously impressed.
Hoping for more of your work,
SNM |
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