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In Mainz
Contributed by
Crimson_Rose
on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 02:01:05 PM in AEST
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In Mainz,
A Lovely Just Born Rainbow
Innocent Kids Playing In A Quaint Park
Stores That Bustle With People
In Mainz,
I Hear Busy, Speeding Cars Whiz By
The Sweet Sound Of Children Rushing Down A Crowded Street
Rain Trickles Down In A Light Shower Onto Filled Roads
In Mainz,
I Smell The Life Of Budding Roses
The Aroma Of Fresh Bread Tempts The Streets
Gas From Filled Cars Threatens Your Breath
In Mainz,
I Feel The Cold, Steel Rails On Lonely Stairs
Rushing Wind Whips Through Me, Chilling My Skin
At Last I Feel The Invigoration Of Being In Mainz
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Crimson_Rose
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2004-07-28 14:01:05]
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Re: In Mainz
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by Sagacious on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 02:28:26 PM AEST
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| As though I'd traveled there, myself! Great word-images paint a picture of the place in vivid tones. From the sight of children playing in a "quaint park," to the trickling of rain; from the sweet scent of fresh bread, to the pungent aroma of gas which "threatens your breath," the descriptions are alive with detail. I must be careful reading such poetry--else I, the Travel Bug's next-bitten, will be. Good job! -KAC- |
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Re: In Mainz
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 02:54:41 PM AEST
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| Nice work - you capture well the essence of the Mainz- I spent a few days there myself way back, and thought this rang true. |
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