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screaming insomniac
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 10:26:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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fundamentally weak
it was always too much
even when it was nothing at all
imaginary battles escalate
always ending in submission
always ending with a handful of pills
always, the hunger to sleep
(in dreams it's never better
the teeth just change in shape
fleeing from shadows that he created
but even these nightmares are blessings
in the face of dread Awake)
hollowed in an hour
searching for escape
life ignored
simply not lived
obsessed with blessed sleep
crying for it
like mother's milk
like an endless fix
like a cure
shoot up lethargy
ingest inward oblivion
whisper the invocations of Coma
(in dreams it's never better
the teeth just seek to rape
a mind left weak and helpless
a mind constantly cowering
from the thought of dread Awake)
hurried, like a chore undone
the rope is looped and tied
eyelids drooping with drowsy desire
the sweet slumber of suicide
intrusive noose
awkward position
and as he kicks the stool away
he prays
"god, let it be eternal sleep
let it be eternal sleep"
(final dream
forever dream
the teeth are bared and chewing
Awakened with epiphany
his sloth was his undoing
hell is what you make of it
and there is no turning back
in a room full of sleeping pills
sits the screaming insomniac)
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Re: screaming insomniac
(User Rating: 1 ) by deathdrop on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 01:41:19 AM AEST (User
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Interesting mass of various words used to make this one of a kind.
I love the last four lines.
"hell is what you make of it
and there is no turning back
in a room full of sleeping pills
sits the screaming insomniac"
they're not the darkest but some how have the most effetc on me.
It's heavily morbid but with sharp life of demons too.
It's excellent!!!! |
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Re: screaming insomniac
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 05:05:33 AM AEST (User
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I read this one because I thought it would be less visceral. I also clicked on it because you're such a good writer, and I found many, varied notions course through my brain whilst tackling this read.
"shoot up lethargy"
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Re: screaming insomniac
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 05:33:58 AM AEST (User
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wow this is such a great write....very deep and dark, and filled with anguish
pixie xx |
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Re: screaming insomniac
(User Rating: 1 ) by pvd on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 08:53:16 AM AEST (User
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The more I read of your work the better it gets. Your work transports me into the frame of mind described. Chilling and realistic (on a mental plane). Loveit!
PVD
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