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Break Me
Contributed by
waos
on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:29:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Burn me up,
cut me down;
break me
break me,
I'll break down.
Steal it,
rape it today;
take me
take me,
I'll fall away.
Don't look back,
turn away;
leave me
leave me,
I'll never stay.
It'll all be over someday,
somehow we'll make it go away;
life can't last too much longer,
and each day I grow stronger.
Scream obscenities,
laugh at the tears;
use me
use me,
I've got a few more years.
Slice me open,
slam me shut;
kill me
kill me,
I'll just be cut.
Burn me up,
cut me down;
break me
break me,
I'll break down.
Copyright ©
waos
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2004-07-27 21:29:26]
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Re: Break Me
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by pyrofairyburning on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:33:02 PM AEST
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| hrmmm, a very good read indeed. I like the structure. May I ask, Who's we, you went from oneself to two people, than oneself. Who does "we" represent, a lover ? |
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Re: Break Me
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by iluvpencils on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:35:38 PM AEST
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Wow. I thought it was amazing! Very powerful. Keep writing.
-Claire |
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Re: Break Me
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by TheVoice on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:52:52 PM AEST
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very powerful piece.
the voice
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Re: Break Me
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:56:20 PM AEST
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| This was very effective. Groovy. Keep 'em coming.--the Moth |
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Re: Break Me
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by BrandySwanson on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 05:52:36 PM AEST
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truely powerful great job
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