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theres no other day but today
Contributed by
bttrflynajar
on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 06:05:29 PM in AEST
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InspirationalPoems
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walk with me to the end of time
and discover all that we didnt mind
look back and see our selfish selves
in our hollow bodies, our empty shells
foolish you say, that was our way
foolish? i say, that was yesterday!
whats done is done
now theres no day but today
look back at me and see the sea
of preposterous worries pervading me.
stop time in its path that never ends
and learn to laugh at the cheerless bends
life might seem to heavy to your dismay
but you must live no day but today.
be strong and wise like the good man says
and learn to live with the tears you shed
wake with a smile and faith in each day
always live no day but today.
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bttrflynajar
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2004-07-27 18:05:29]
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Re: theres no other day but today
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 06:09:44 PM AEST
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LOVED IT! i absolutly agree, and you put it into words SO well
i especially like the lines:
"look back at me and see the sea
of preposterous worries pervading me."
you did an awesome job, hope to read more poems from you.
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Re: theres no other day but today
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by SweetRhythm on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 06:01:14 AM AEST
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Whoa that was good. Very refreshing upbeat sentiments that brighten up ones soul. I liked it a lot. Your style is fresh. Good stuff.
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Re: theres no other day but today
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 3rd June 2006 @ 09:55:31 PM AEST
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| if i remember right, this is a drastic improvement of what i have seen of your early work. i always like to see some good vocabulary thrown into a poem. shows that the writer isnt a ditz and can actually use some good words instead of words that 2nd graders know. i see that unlike your earlier work you are spelling better. youve got some good rhythm in this, which makes this a lot better than without it. seems kind of immature in some parts and too optomistic/idealistic. needs to use the proper notation for dialogue as well. sometimes a bit too over the top with using the same words. so while you get points for using some good words, you get points off for using the same words over and over. sometimes the best poems are the ones that dont have a single rhyme. those poems will always win out over poems that use today, way, say, pray, yesterday, dismay, etc for rhymes and rhymes within the verses. |
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