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one word
Contributed by
shorty_52
on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 12:27:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
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one word was all it took
to set her off again
she went bolistic the other day
one word was all the people say.
the word was death
she took a breath
bolistic is how she acts.
nothing will change the way she reacts.
she is now bald
her clothes are all torn
her teeth are gritty
and her shoes are out worn.
when people see her
they almost always run.
she's so crazy
that she even killed her son.
he spoke the word.
she killed him slow.
she broke his arm
with a nasty blow.
then after that
she stabed him twise
left him there
for all the mice.
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Re: one word
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 12:38:27 PM AEST
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good poem Shorty.. hope to read more soon,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: one word
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by WinterFawn on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 12:43:17 PM AEST
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Very dark and vivid write. Nice verse.
WinterFawn |
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Re: one word
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 01:05:56 PM AEST
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| Very interesting. Like the end, shaaaawty!--Mothy |
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Re: one word
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 01:42:26 PM AEST
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| Dark and grim are the feelings it conveys as well as a touch if sadness. Good job. |
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Re: one word
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by AspenGlow on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 06:43:48 AM AEST
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Bald, with gritty teeth, torn cloths, and shoes worn.....be still my beating heart.
I like it, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: one word
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 10:07:40 AM AEST
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It is dark and very well written.
Kie : ) |
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Re: one word
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by Heartfilledblood on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 02:28:26 PM AEST
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| This is crazy. good write babe :) |
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Re: one word
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by Heartfilledblood on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 02:28:35 PM AEST
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This is crazy. good write babe :)
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Re: one word
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by Vermillion on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 04:06:38 PM AEST
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very dark and twisted,just the way i like em.an excellent write from and excellent mind.
~vermillion~ |
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Re: one word
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by YouMakeMeThrowUp-A-Little on
Sunday, 15th August 2004 @ 02:48:41 PM AEST
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| wow,ally thats really deep,very very good and very well written |
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