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Contributed by
loopylou
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Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:28:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I don’t think you realise
everyday I slip away
and I loose myself
and just that little touch of reality
everybody feels so far away from me
I know tomorrow will be the same
but just a little less real
eventually the pain will dull
and it will all just leave me feeling numb
I will be left in nothingness
and you will feel no loss
but today’s just the start of tomorrow
and I’m already gone
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loopylou
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2004-07-26 15:28:11]
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Re: gone
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by pyrofairyburning on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:30:13 PM AEST
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| I like the ending ... but improvement on the grammer would help. |
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Re: gone
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by apollo on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:31:51 PM AEST
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i hope your not already gone. no matter how hard life can seem in certain situations do not give up. we are all meant for something here and we need to find out what. keep writing and keep believing in what you write about, the answer will reveal itself.
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Re: gone
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by forgottensorrow on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:37:08 PM AEST
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very, very sad. I hope you don't really feel this way all the time, I know I do sometimes, and thats usually when I write...
good write.
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Re: gone
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by Stoney1 on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 05:51:29 AM AEST
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Intriguing...this one made me ponder. I like the effort
you put in to describe that condition of withdrawal the
spirit undergoes when it begins to heal itself; although
you took it toward a negative aspect, I prefer to view it
in a more positive light.
One thing, it's lose not loose.
Otherwise, excellent work!
Stoney |
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