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So Fragile
Contributed by
spike
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Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 05:32:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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So easily broken, so hard to repair
But you have moved on, so what do you care?
So long in the making, so quickly undone
Divide and lay bare all that was one.
So fragile, so delicate, the fabric we weave
Did you even think twice before deciding to leave?
You peeled me away like a sloughing of skin
And all I have left is the hollow within.
So much time to reach union, so hard to find grace,
Did you find it so easy to retreat from that place?
What once was an Eden is now barren and forlorn
A world in the forming will never be born.
So long to build trust, so quick to betray
Did you ever look back as you bustled away?
To survey the wounded adrift in your wake
At your terrible power to make and unmake.
So difficult to find you, so easily lost
You are free of all burden, but what of the cost?
Now you have moved on, leaving a trail of despair,
So easily broken, so hard to repair.
Copyright ©
spike
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2004-07-26 05:32:02]
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Re: So Fragile
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by BrandySwanson on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 08:36:58 AM AEST
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this was sad but you've written it well. I can relate with this poem. [ great job ]
Brandy
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Re: So Fragile
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 12:47:49 PM AEST
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| nice work on this - |
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Re: So Fragile
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 6th August 2004 @ 04:26:22 AM AEST
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| So full of heartache and sadness, this really stirred up my emotions. Great write. |
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Re: So Fragile
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 10:28:28 PM AEST
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I am again impressed. Having read a few of your recent pieces, I started poking through your work. I must honestly tell you that I think you're under-read.
Nice touch to begin and end with the same line here. The entire piece is very well presented... that just gives it a bit of a bump as it ends.
Very well done! You're very talented.
SNM |
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