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Fallen
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 07:56:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Fallen
I’ve fallen.
Into a ditch of pure black.
The ring above me yells at me,
So broken I yell back.
Locked inside walls of nature,
My lungs scream into the night,
But my heart knows failure.
Diamonds stare at me,
Illuminate the sky with beauty.
The clouds dance upon them
With confidence and purity.
This ring is too far of reach for me,
My soul wont seem to stretch,
My heart ripping at the seams,
Tears escape the pain.
Why cant I join?
I hear them calling.
Why cant I join?….
Because I’m too broken…
I have
fallen.
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xxbreathlessx
... [
2004-07-24 19:56:53]
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Re: Fallen
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 08:00:05 PM AEST
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beautifully human........ hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Fallen
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by xlooseroftomorrowx on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 08:37:40 PM AEST
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very emotional.. good write. i like it a lot, and thank you for your comment on my poem. keep up the good work.
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Re: Fallen
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by MoonbeamBaby on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 09:27:21 PM AEST
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I loved it, its what i can relate to.
~~~April~~~ |
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Re: Fallen
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by Vermillion on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 11:39:31 PM AEST
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i was very impressed,it had a nice mystique to it.excellent write
~vermillion~ |
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Re: Fallen
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by xemptydecemberx on
Sunday, 25th July 2004 @ 01:43:23 AM AEST
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| very very good |
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Re: Fallen
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by pixie on
Sunday, 25th July 2004 @ 10:42:00 AM AEST
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this is such a good write.......
pixie xx |
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