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i
Contributed by
pvd
on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 08:26:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I look in the mirror
a two-dimensional image,
tired, worn, unshaven,
a touch of gray, aged,
skin and bone,
memories, scars,
feelings, tattoos
face to face,
blood shot and aqua-blue
infinite reflections
within the eye
on the I,
study the pupil,
the darkness,
my being,
no past, no future,
only now
essence decoded,
the physical
and spiritual,
chronicled
and catalogued,
my life reduced:
a biological function
a chemical reaction
a mathematical equation
I cease to exist,
I become
the square root
of negative one.
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pvd
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2004-07-22 08:26:17]
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Re: i
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 08:32:47 AM AEST
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Skillfully and creatively deduced.
"study the pupil"
Well worth reading.
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: i
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by AspenGlow on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 08:42:52 AM AEST
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Yes the negative, but for the picnic there go I
up in smoke and gone with the wind.
I like this proem much, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: i
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by Stoney1 on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 09:06:32 AM AEST
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This was an excellent read, and I'm not prone to using
superlatives lightly. I thoroughly enjoyed plumbing the
depths of this reflective piece.
Not a mis-step anywhere. You understand the value of
clarity and conciseness.
Heh...I'll stop now, before you get the impression that
I don't.*s*
Stoney |
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Re: i
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by Beni on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 09:22:08 AM AEST
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Well done for your acheivements on this poem.
it is very interesting that you used the image in the mirror as the subject.
A good read ^-^ |
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Re: i
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by pixie on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 10:49:51 AM AEST
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very creative write, well worded
pixie xx |
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Re: i
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 02:52:55 PM AEST
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infinite reflections
within the eye
on the I,
Nice job - thought this was well done and honest.
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Re: i
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by wray on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 10:37:50 AM AEST
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Another captivating and mind-boggling piece. Kinda like watching a man's engrossing journey deeper and deeper into himself... until you reach a brick wall of perception.
It's very sneaky how your poems seem geared toward making sure the reader reads right to the end to get the message.... |
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