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The Story Of A Boy
Contributed by
PieceOfABrokenSoul
on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:53:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Once upon a time,
In a world so sublime,
Stood a boy, clad in sorrow,
Always dreaming of tomorrow.
Day by day his heart would give way,
To the poison, hate, and despair of today.
Given away to his heroic form,
Was a sword that only he could conform,
To the shape of his only one love,
Or even to the symbol of a little white dove.
Taking the effort of a god,
He formed a mountain to a clod.
Even with all this power,
His mouth was still sour,
With the death of his mother,
And also of his father.
Taking the story,
To a night also stormy,
We find our hero dead,
Face filled with dread,
As he lay next to his sister,
Who was also dead, expression still sinister.
This is the story of a boy,
Once heroic and full of joy,
Now dead and ashamed,
By the demons who thought it a game.
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PieceOfABrokenSoul
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2004-07-19 12:53:38]
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Re: The Story Of A Boy
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by pixie on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:56:22 PM AEST
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amazing write for a 14 yr old... my hats off to you
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Re: The Story Of A Boy
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by C2C on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 01:02:50 PM AEST
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Great story, kinda sad but like pixie said, well written. And being that your only 14, i'm jealous of your talent. :P
~Tuesday~ |
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Re: The Story Of A Boy
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 02:39:44 AM AEST
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I like the first part of the poem, honestly, I think it could have built up better.
Keep writing...you have imagination and you have talent.
Looking forward to read more of your work.
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