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suicide bed
Contributed by
Blue
on
Saturday, 26th October 2002 @ 05:15:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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i lay on these Red sheets
cradling my arm
to a chest Heaving rapidly
with shallow breath
and all i can Think of
is a thousand thoughts inside my head
my sheets are Red
i cannot tell if it's from Blood
seeping through my shirtsleeves
dripping down my Hands
or if it's how they were made
in some third-world Labor camp
someday soon i should be an Anarchist
to avoid the exploitation of humans like me
this is the only coherent thought running
through an empty mind
i have been over by a cruel God
a sad Fate
i close my Brown,
Souless eyes
hoping to Die
and relieve this Sickness
deep inside
this bed is Comfortless
my Suicide Bed
Copyright ©
Blue
... [
2002-10-26 17:15:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by OreO on
Saturday, 26th October 2002 @ 05:36:03 PM AEST (User
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I can relate with this
poem very well. Take comfort
in what helps you get through,
i understand what this is like.
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::. |
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jan_Oskar_Hansen on
Saturday, 26th October 2002 @ 07:01:01 PM AEST (User
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a frightening poem very good though |
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by peace123 on
Sunday, 27th October 2002 @ 12:38:12 AM AEST (User
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sorry i am not sure what to say..sorta speachless after reading it....indeed a very powerful poem...thanks for sharing it.. |
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by orgygirl on
Sunday, 27th October 2002 @ 01:24:03 AM AEST (User
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This is really a sad poem but as sad as it may be I can completely relate. In my poetry you'll see a lot of suicide but we write what we feel. I know you'll get over this feeling if I was able to. I really liked how you concluded this write. Very well done.
Take care
Rebecca |
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 27th October 2002 @ 02:59:36 AM AEST (User
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Fantastic! I love dark poems and this one is truely and emotional outpouring. The pain of living can be overwhelming at times. I have a few poems running along the same lines as this one that I will be posting in the future and I hope you find the time to read them. Great write! Larry |
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Re: suicide bed
(User Rating: 1 ) by Opium on
Sunday, 27th October 2002 @ 03:44:05 AM AEST (User
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...noire ...dérisoire ...dark poetry, not bad, not bad at all. |
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