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While the skies submit
Contributed by
Tanmaya
on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:44:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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While the skies submit
to the ancient red of the twilight,
hear my broken words.
When the wide wings of the
trees try to fly again…
hear me in my sleep.
Isn’t there a world unknown
to the world, where
the fairies sing of crystal-tears
and the lonely petals
blown by the winds dream.
Isn’t there a road to the
land of magic…
hidden somewhere beyond
what the eye sees,
hidden somewhere in the
hunger of the stars.
While the flags
of the mist unfurl,
while the night is still
confused and the dawn
is still wandering far…
find me a new smile.
Isn’t there sweet laughter
that only the quietness
can teach.
Isn’t there a lost season
that the nightingales sing about,
that the shadows stretch
under the rocks and look for…
hidden somewhere beyond
the far horizon,
hidden somewhere in the
heart of together.
Copyright ©
Tanmaya
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2004-07-19 06:44:22]
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Re: While the skies submit
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by reilt on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:58:06 AM AEST
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| oh wow, this is such a beautiful poem and your first on this site i see. i can tell from this there are many great writes to come. i look forward to them. this is lovely. thank you for sharing. |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 07:05:49 AM AEST
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Its not often I use 'beautiful' to describe a poem submitted here, but with these lines;
"the fairies sing of crystal-tears
and the lonely petals
blown by the winds dream."
Free verses of finery. I look forward to reading more from you . . .
and welcome to YPDC. |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by pvd on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 07:14:21 AM AEST
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| You capture the yearning of most poets and readers of poetry, dreams of peace and understanding or the escape from the mundane realities of life. Keep writing and dreaming. |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by pixie on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 07:23:13 AM AEST
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Wonderful first submission of poetry, look forward to reading more from you soon,
takecare,
pixie xx
WELCOME TO YPDC :):) |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by JT on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 07:29:53 AM AEST
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What a serene write but with such powerful wording. keep them coming.
-jt- |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:37:54 PM AEST
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Wow! This is incredible. I love the imagery, and the mythic, ancient style.
Isn’t there a lost season
that the nightingales sing about,
Truly wonderful. This feels straight out of Tolkien. Bravo! I'll be waiting for more.
Andrew
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Re: While the skies submit
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:50:15 PM AEST
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This is amazing...
So very beautiful and it actually bought tears to my eyes,
thought im not quite sure why.
Maybe because i wish for this world to be real.
This is stunning. One of the best poems i have ever read.
Amazing...
Phil xxx |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 01:04:05 PM AEST
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this is really good, I love the description of the world you long before- especially the "red twilight"- beautiful imagery! Welcome to YPDC
Em |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by katyqueen35 on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 01:48:07 PM AEST
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Very outstanding job on this poem ...
I really enjoy reading this...thanks for sharing..... |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 08:35:42 PM AEST
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What a lovely first post, Tanmaya --- it reads as partly melancholy and partly hopeful, but mostly as a poet's dreaming... I am intrigued by the piece and I very much enjoyed some of the descriptive phrases that you embedded in this.
Welcome to YPDC - I'm looking forward to reading more of your work,
SNM |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 12:26:00 AM AEST
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Lovely poem..keep writing on..welcome here
venkat |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 02:09:02 AM AEST
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absolutely beautiful, warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 10:28:17 PM AEST
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Your work is exquisitely elegant and I look forward to many more lovely pieces from you. Welcome to our world. I do so hope you will enjoy it and take enjoyment from the talent and friendship that abides here in vast amounts. Welcome, my friend, welcome.
Rita |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 04:05:05 PM AEST
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What a wonderful way to enter YPDC.
Your words are cleverly written to the point of being prophetic.
Thank you! and Welcome! |
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Re: While the skies submit
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 04:43:41 PM AEST
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You have a gift that most of us only dream for. Your imagery is absolutely amazing.
Please keep writing.
A very warm welcome to YPDC.
Take care.
David |
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