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Undress Me
Contributed by
pixie
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Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 10:39:25 AM in AEST
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Undress me & breathe me in,
Trace your tongue over my hot skin,
Cup your hands around my breast,
Lay me down for a lover’s rest.
Stroke my shoulders with your hands,
I don’t need reminding you are a man,
With your strong yet gentle touch,
I want your loving & passion so much.
Unwrap me like a sexual gift,
Hold me close, my body needs a lift,
As I pull you into my secret place,
I love to see the excited look on your face.
We melt like ice cream in the sun,
As our sexual wanting becomes one,
Teasing each others pleasure zones,
Loving the fact we are really alone.
You awaken all my deep senses,
With you I don’t have any defences,
I let you right into my desires,
Where your love always fans my fires.
Copyright ©
pixie
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Re: Undress Me
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by hrpuffnstuff on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 11:28:51 AM AEST
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krissy that's so romantic , so touching. damn it wheres d?
love hxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx |
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Re: Undress Me
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by Stoney1 on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 11:46:32 AM AEST
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Melting like ice cream in the sun, eh?
Melting ice cream gets all sticky doesn't it?
..'scuse me while I go have a cold shower...
******putting fingers in collar to l o o s e n it,
while mumbling*****
Damned good poem.*g*
Yep damned fine poem!
Stoney
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Re: Undress Me
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by RhythmBndt on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 12:02:58 PM AEST
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Very nice write, something I would write :)
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Re: Undress Me
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by little_genna on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 01:14:27 PM AEST
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| very different. i like it. makes me think about the passion and tenderness a guy can have. just an excellent write hun |
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Re: Undress Me
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 03:06:19 PM AEST
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very nice! strong words with an arousing twist.
a great read. A+++++ |
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Re: Undress Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 04:43:18 PM AEST
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Hmn. I was all ready for a sizzling climax, when I stumbled over the last line . . . and sort of was left gasping and confused .. .
May I suggest an alternative?
"I let you into my desires,
As of your love,
this girl never tires"
Of course, its a bit longer and out of rhythm, I guess, but it wouldn't leave me frustrated after reading it . . . which I guess, Is a compliment to the rest of your poem, because it certainly lit a fire in my mind!
Thanks for the raised temperature. |
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Re: Undress Me
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by Dawny on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 06:05:09 PM AEST
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(lol at neptunes comment, your so funny!!!)
Wow, this is hot stuff. It shows your tender and caring side, and your love for your partner shines through. Very sensual, I agree ice cream is sticky though lol
amother excellent poem, keep em coming
Love Dawny xx |
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Re: Undress Me
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 08:43:47 PM AEST
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awww... so romantic and passionate, whoo whoo! lol, i love how you ended it too:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Undress Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 09:01:56 PM AEST
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Uh ummmm, nice, yes, very very nice, Krissy.
How about this on the last two lines?
" I let you right into my desires,
Where your love always fan the fire."
Rita
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Re: Undress Me
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by venkat on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 02:11:17 AM AEST
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oooh..my dear lovely girl..what a sweet magic this is ..deeply romantic.very hot
my dear hmm..I have to run for my love.
;-) venkat |
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Re: Undress Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:36:59 AM AEST
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| Who could resist the title, and you did a great job - passionate write. |
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Re: Undress Me
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by Bruce on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:52:12 PM AEST
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| love too xxxx |
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