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such a pretty smile
Contributed by
grip-wth-broken-fingers
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Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:38:51 AM in AEST
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a smile that brings sunshine to any ones morbid life
such beautiful eyes that could make the most unhappy person smile
but as this beautiful little child gasped for his breath
all the sunshine faded away
and the clouds came
little fists clench mine trying to cope with so much pain
eyes ones filled with life are now filled with tears
won't you take and give his pain to me
because such a klittle thing does'nt deserve to be
in so much agony
such a beautiful smile as his beautiful eyes open
such beautiful eyes as he look back at me
such a beautfiul sound
as he takes another breath
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Re: such a pretty smile
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by apollo on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 12:00:22 PM AEST
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im glad this ended happily. you must be an amazing friend to this person, holding them through times of pain. very very beautiful write, very tough at the beginning but the end is worth it.
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Re: such a pretty smile
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by emeraldeyes on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 12:15:16 PM AEST
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| a bit dramatic...I was starting to worry! I'm glad of the happy ending...Very nice write. I could almost see the whole thing in my head. You use words well. Keep it up. You're good! |
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Re: such a pretty smile
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by DeLeriousTearZ on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:44:04 PM AEST
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You write Beautifully! Its a great write especially the first verse! I love it! I'll be reading more of your stUff!
*Jo |
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