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Hope
Contributed by
hrpuffnstuff
on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 07:04:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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My head is a tumble dryer spinning
With thoughts that intrude willy nilly
Negative feelings of myself as a being
Coupled with fear of the future
My heart is a teacup smashed to pieces
By people who I love and trusted
Unlovable feelings of myself as a being
Coupled with fear of the future
My arms are cotton buds still intact
Blood still doing its usual cycle
Thoughts of ending myself as a being
Versus fear of the kids’ future
My feelings and fear is a fire burning
Deep within my soul, yet from the ashes
Thoughts of myself as a worthwhile being
Coupled with hope for the future
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2004-07-17 07:04:22]
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Re: Hope
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by Archie on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 07:18:04 AM AEST
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| You paint a clear picture of what your struggles and dreams are they are very similar to my own. |
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Re: Hope
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by emeraldeyes on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 08:30:30 AM AEST
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| nice poem, i can sense your frustrations |
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Re: Hope
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by pixie on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:38:37 AM AEST
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wow, Halyey so sad, yet written so beautifully,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Hope
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by hooray_its_jen on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:52:27 AM AEST
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Very beautifully written. There's a lot of anger and sadness that you've expressed very well.
Blessings
Love, Jenna |
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Re: Hope
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:49:10 AM AEST
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Very well said....
Jenni |
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Re: Hope
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 09:44:46 AM AEST
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Stark and clearcut. I like the teacup reference, although the cotton-buds were a little peculiar, to my mind. But it obviously means something to you, so that's the main thing.
Emotive and involving.
Thanks for sharing again. |
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Re: Hope
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 12:26:25 PM AEST
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Ah - I recognize the process of self examination through writing here - I know it quite well myself. I'm pleased to see that you end of a positive note... and therefore wonder about why you slipped this into the suicide poetry category (it reads more as something worthy of the self struggling category).
I love the reference to 'from the ashes'. It is, I believe, quite a lovely reference to finding/allowing hope to return - out from under fear and pain and much struggle, to be placed again, delicately, at the top of the heap where it so rightly belongs. Overall, well done!
With wishes that the hope continues to grow,
SNM |
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Re: Hope
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by katyqueen35 on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:23:11 AM AEST
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Yes i agree with the others...
very nicely written piece... |
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