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The Black Pool
Contributed by
ArdRi79
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Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 12:43:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The rain pours down
From a dark sky,
onto the buttress of the black pool
It's surface seeming to fizz and shimmer
as I watch from beneath,
peerig up through its murky depths
Not for the first time
since I plunged in,
And its cold waters closed over me
Even so I am blinded
by a ray of sunlight
that falling from the clouds pierces my wintry tomb,
And I move towards it And I name it hope.
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ArdRi79
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2004-07-16 12:43:14]
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Re: The Black Pool
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by emystar on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 02:05:46 PM AEST
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Woww!
this write is a masterpeice of hope for all that deal with the same.
I take meds that help me but I know before I was eternally depressed. U've captured your subject well.
Your Dr. sure can help with meds. It gives one much more hope to get thru the tangled web we live on called planet Earth.
Keep writing as u probably know it's a great healer.
luv, huggs,
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Re: The Black Pool
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by MaRy_JaNe_420 on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 02:12:04 PM AEST
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| dude i know how u fell life can be a *****, just remember when life throws u lemons THROW THEM BACK |
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Re: The Black Pool
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by freespirit on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 02:25:36 PM AEST
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I think it may help if you only read happy poetry the other garbage will only make you sad look within your self to find out who you are and what you want in life an go for it
remember its your life
God Bless freespirt
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Re: The Black Pool
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by Daydreamer on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 04:12:32 PM AEST
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| Depression is a sad thing and so many people today are being faced with it. I am glad you found something to give you hope some don't and that's when it turns scarry. `Day` |
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Re: The Black Pool
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 06:04:23 PM AEST
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excellent I to struggle with depression quite a bit and I am glad that you are still able to see hope despite the oppressive quilt it often lays down. Keep up the writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: The Black Pool
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by avanottingham on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 04:56:58 PM AEST
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I don't see this as depressing, or someone who is so down and depressed because the way you wrote makes you sound so resolute, full of conviction, the very spirit of a fighter who will survive.
A great poem should be thought provoking and you have most definitely achieved that with this work. Absolutely wonderful!
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