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I'm Falling
Contributed by
pixie
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Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:58:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I am slowly falling,
Can you hear me calling,
Calling for you my love,
Please look down from above.
I am losing my grip,
Have suffered a bad blip,
It has totally winded me,
It’ll take time to again feel free.
I pray that my pain will disappear,
Along with the heartache & the fear,
But my plea goes unheard,
Inside I am shaken & stirred.
I feel like grains of sand,
Falling through your strong hand,
Please hold on to me tight,
Help me win this on-going fight.
Things are beginning to look black,
Away at my strength sadness hacks,
Chopping & cutting to my bone,
Leaving me feeling worn out & alone.
I am scared & I am shattered,
Feel broken & battered,
I need to get up & carry on,
But I don’t feel that strong.
Things are coming to a head,
All my healed wounds have bled,
I feel weak & defeated,
As my pain is constantly repeated.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-07-15 11:58:15]
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Re: I'm Falling
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by RhythmBndt on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 12:26:33 PM AEST
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| Nice flow & beautifully written :) |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by _Raspberry_ on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 12:41:02 PM AEST
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| Yet another beautiful expression of your feelings pixie...I love it! Hope it's helping you work through things! |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by shelby on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 12:46:32 PM AEST
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so beautifully sad Im sorry that your having these problems but know that your never alone
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Re: I'm Falling
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by deathdrop on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 01:16:02 PM AEST
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This sets a powerful image in my mind about how you feel and what your life is like.
It’s very beautifully written, pixie!!!
Good job. You’re ability of writing is completely amazing. Keep your chin up, you’ll get through this! |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by WinterFawn on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 01:32:32 PM AEST
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You are very good with expressing emotions in your writing...very nice verse.
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Re: I'm Falling
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by Archie on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 03:17:56 PM AEST
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| Wow, If this is how you feel I hope you feel better soon. great write. |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 03:45:43 PM AEST
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May you be lifted by the spirit of friends that gather around you to help ease some of the pain. I hope you are feeling well soon. I know this feeling all to well, and I sure hope yours eases. Take care krissee.... (((YOU)))
Angel always...joni |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 05:21:49 PM AEST
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This is vivid and compelling. An excellent portrayal of very powerful feelings. Keep your hope up! And always follow the Light.
Andrew |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:20:40 PM AEST
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Just keep trying. You will overcome these hardships.
Rita |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by venkat on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 12:56:00 AM AEST
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So sad..its heart touching..Ooh..don't worry..hope every thing will be allright
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Re: I'm Falling
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 01:12:08 AM AEST
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Oh Pixie...I hope you feel better soon.....
This is a great expression of your feelings.......
You are so very talented...
Hugs
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Re: I'm Falling
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by little_genna on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 11:00:39 AM AEST
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Pixie hun this is amazingly beautiful and sad. As always this is another one of your talented writes. Im here if you need a friend. Thank you for sharing so much emotion hun. This was so heart touching *hugs you*
much love and hugs
Gen xx |
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Re: I'm Falling
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:07:25 PM AEST
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I know how you feel...i'm goin through the same stuff...i know how hard it is to deal with....sometimes it really really sux...but u'll make it through...great poem...i like it alot
Lots of Love
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Re: I'm Falling
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by iluvpencils on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 12:34:46 PM AEST
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Wow. I can relate to this. I especially like this line :
I pray that my pain will disappear,
Along with the heartache & the fear |
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