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Untitled
Contributed by
Archie
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Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:29:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
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When I played the dirge
all came encouraging
quick to help and urge
When I spoke of love
all expressed how much they longed
how much they had been wronged
And now I speak of truth
a soul hardly knows my name
vanished most like a city sunk
far beneath dessert sands
Pilate said "What is truth"
then he let an innocent be killed
We shrink away into the dark
our love becomes distilled
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
Let the torrent of tears sweep over me
as I take the needle and thread and mend my heart
Even though I knew you one day would betray me
I still did my best and gave my heart
and now I'm sad
like I predicted
I must now find
reason to try again
For now just leave
me to my weeping
then I'll forgive
when I am over it
Now I know how Jesus felt when he spoke in John 6 saying to his disciples "Do you want to leave me too"
I will not at this time answer any comments to this poem.
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Archie
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Re: Untitled
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by _Raspberry_ on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:53:54 PM AEST
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| It is fine that you will not answer me. I just want you to know that this poem and the explanation were very touching. It hurts when there seems like there is no one around, who even cares, when the last person you thought you could depend on turns on you. I have been there, and I formed a friendship that has now lasted seven years. Reach out to those who want to be there right now. Because those are the ones who truly love you. |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 02:05:03 PM AEST
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No comment expected. Take your time, mend the heart and love again. Love is always worth taking a chance on. I am always here if you need to talk. Email me if you ever want too.
Rita |
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 03:43:58 PM AEST
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*Sighs* and *Tears* and *Hugs*
Jenni |
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 04:13:41 PM AEST
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Your words made my heart sink. This write is stuffed full of heartache and I'm very touched by it. This is truly a beautiful write. I'll leave it at that as not to intrude unnecessarily. I'm a PM away if you want to chat... heartache, unfortunately, is something I know well.
With compassion and understanding,
SNM |
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Re: Untitled
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 07:22:33 PM AEST
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Deep in our soul lies suffering that only we have to endure. In Christ, it helps to know someone suffered much more than we possibly could. This is a somber piece of heartbreaking work. Through these words you wrote, may you understand, you are never alone!
~Angel~ always...joni |
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Re: Untitled
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by apollo on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 07:23:37 PM AEST
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very very well written, very moving and inspiring. captivated my every emotion. archie you truly are a talent.
brandon |
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Re: Untitled
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 03:01:55 AM AEST
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Wonderful expression.
"a soul hardly knows my name
vanished most like a city sunk
far beneath dessert sands"
That is quite profound, as is the rest of the message in this work.
I find it refreshing and honestly emotional.
Thanks for writing. |
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Re: Untitled
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 08:15:47 PM AEST
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| this was a strong emotional depiction. thank you for sharing. |
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