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Brittle
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:16:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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In pursuing you I went and lost myself
Snared by shallow oaths and words
To the eye I am the emblem of sentience
But I'm fading on the inside,
slowly devoured by the filth that is me.
Heaven knows where I have been all this while
Too tumultous to be revealed
But in the wish of redemption
I ceased to be existing
And now solitude is the omega
in my alphabet.
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Re: Brittle
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:29:06 AM AEST
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I am startled to read this..
"slowly devoured by the filth that is me"..great feeling of dejection..the the parody of ceased to be existing..later taking shelter in solitude..
Very short, very strong and powerful expression of emotional feelings. thats amazing my dear friend :-) venkat
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Re: Brittle
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:31:00 AM AEST
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AV, this is so emotional. How many times in our lives have we gone full throttle into something and come out of it empty and disappointed? I know I have and it does leave life bleak.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Brittle
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:39:44 AM AEST
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Yes gained by a false hope... I understand this;;;
Great write
Cheers Robert |
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Re: Brittle
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by Asatru on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 07:07:50 AM AEST
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| short and bitter. I like this. Keep writing. |
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Re: Brittle
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 09:58:21 AM AEST
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very good write... i loved it..
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Brittle
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by arden on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 10:46:23 PM AEST
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this was a great write. very emotional and sad. iv been there before too. a really powerful poem. had a great use of words. nicely done. keep it up.
Arden |
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Re: Brittle
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 10:53:01 PM AEST
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Such strength your poems have.
This is so sad and emotional, deppressing words enhance the emotions.
Great write. |
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