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* Love breeze *
Contributed by
venkat
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Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:16:33 AM in AEST
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Like an aerial car of songs
You’re flowing like breeze
Unseen; how can I see you?
Where can I search for you?
Not even a minute if you
Are not there I can’t breathe
In sleep my eyes are closed
You’re like a dream behind
My eye lids, when I opened
Them you have disappeared
Like a flash of lightening;
Are you not my soul singing
Like a waterfall in my heart?
14-7-2004
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:23:34 AM AEST
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Ahh I could almost feel that breeze, my friend....
Jenni |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by katyqueen35 on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:32:04 AM AEST
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| A lovely write... |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:36:38 AM AEST
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Thank you for your lovely words;
Cheers Robert.. (Kamalalaksa). Jaya Om Shi Krishna |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by JT on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 12:41:41 AM AEST
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Short but very sweet. great write
-jt- |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:11:47 AM AEST
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| Absoutely amazing...I kid you not. I love the choice of words here, it is very dreamy and heartwrenching for some reason...excellent write as usual. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:37:56 AM AEST
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Such exquisite beauty in such small verse. You never cease to amaze me.
Rita |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by kalika_vidya on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 05:47:20 AM AEST
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Very sweet expression from a spiritual soul..
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 10:02:18 AM AEST
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another beautiful write from you Venkat...
your lil pixie friend...
xxx |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 11:13:10 AM AEST
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Your words flow like a warm breeze on a summers day,ever fragrant, yet warms you inside. Your soul sings while it sleeps, and brings forth abundant beauty as it is awake.
A true spirited soul!!! Short, but evocative.
Angel always...joni |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by jonteD on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:50:52 PM AEST
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Where is the love that leaves our hearts hurt?
Great write |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 04:51:18 PM AEST
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Beautiful my dear friend. Your words are so crystal clear and a balm to a tired poets heart. I loved the last two lines really ended the poem well i thought.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by katyqueen35 on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 11:52:56 PM AEST
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Your poems are soooo Beautifully written.....
I hope my poems will get as good some day... |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 01:30:46 AM AEST
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How unique, and gentle and surprizing all rolled into one VenKat...kind sir.
How lovely to say a 'waterfall in my heart!"
I can picture that so plainly....
Out of your usual beautiful writes Venkat,
but always lovely and unqiue indeed!
Enjoyed this one tremendously.
Poetic hugs,
consue
Thank you for letting me know! I wouldn't want to miss it! |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Archie on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 03:11:59 AM AEST
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| This is an awesome poem. I am espeacially fond of the last 2 lines |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 10:24:11 AM AEST
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| lovely as always, refreshing and clear like water falling. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by arden on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 11:16:21 AM AEST
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beautiful poem as always venkat.
great work.
i enjoyed it very much :)
Arden |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by emystar on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 10:32:01 PM AEST
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Beautifull, tantalizzing write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 06:29:01 PM AEST
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beautifully powerful poem of love, the ending is so breathtaking:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by BrandySwanson on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 02:24:06 AM AEST
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beautiful poem great job
Brandy |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st July 2004 @ 02:46:04 AM AEST
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great work, i loved that image of the waterfall in the heart well done once again.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 21st July 2004 @ 11:07:01 PM AEST
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Eloquent and wonderful.
Your poems on love never fail to captivate me.
With each of your poems, I'm longing more and more to find love in my life.
Excellent choice of words. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by WinterFawn on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 06:39:48 AM AEST
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Very beautiful verse....Love the line "like a waterfall in my heart".
WinterFawn |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by AspenGlow on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 09:07:23 AM AEST
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An image in the mist, may the sun not rise to burn away that mist.......and may I dwell in the twilight of the dawn for all time.
Beautiful poem, thank you for sharing. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Gentledove on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 01:39:06 AM AEST
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A beautiful write Venkat.
Gentledove |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 06:51:31 AM AEST
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Heavenly beautifull.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by thumper on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 06:11:47 AM AEST
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Yes, our hearts sing when we're in love! And we dream of our love's also. You have a knack for capturing emotions very well. :o) Write on, Venkat, write on!!
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 07:03:35 PM AEST
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Love is a breeze indeed.. for it is as fleeting as it often is. How often do we find it floating in the clouds but it is always insubstantial whenever we reach out.
A skillfull rendition indeed of the fleeting feel of LOVE! Masterful piece of work. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Scarlett on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:07:29 AM AEST
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beautiful, i was rapt from start to finish.
some of your similes are breathtaking. |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by inoc on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 05:51:45 AM AEST
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Venkat, I loved all the poem...but love the last line expecially!
So talented thou are~
cheers!~ |
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Re: * Love breeze *
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 08:00:23 AM AEST
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Ah, Love.... I miss it. Well captured thoughts. May love always abound in your life. A great poet deserves a great love.
Take care.
David |
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