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repeating drop
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 11:13:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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troubled life
grasping air
reaching out
no-ones there
all alone
tumbling in
downward spiral
never ends
over over
doesnt stop
this hellish
repeating drop
reoccuring errors
devastating pain
reappearing slices
pulsating vien
failure prone
never enough
doing right
always tough
slip away
another place
maybe then
wont discrace
the ones
I love
and place
high above
but yet
I fail
that is
my tale
it repeats
again again
painful life
traps in
struggle more
wanna succeed
thats all
I need
but never
get ahead
lose until
im dead
Copyright ©
holderofthestone
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2004-07-13 23:13:45]
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Re: repeating drop
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 02:37:54 AM AEST
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Good write: like the way it's been set ot
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Re: repeating drop
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 10:04:03 AM AEST
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awww this is so sad, you have written this well Holder..
pixie xx |
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Re: repeating drop
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 07:03:34 PM AEST
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Very sad but u tell it so well.
Hang tuff, my friend. Tommorow is another day. Not all but most of the folks that do get ahead ususally at someone elses' exspence.
Not all but many.
Ccheer up my friend we all have these type problems and they are very seldom easy.
luv, huggs,
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Re: repeating drop
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 01:27:39 AM AEST
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Very sad holder........but have courgeous......never give up........hand in there.....on a song and a prayer.......if you are a praying person holder.......pray and let him know just like in this poem.......then give it to him...and leave it there.......never take it back.
Great but very sad write.
You are in my prayers too!
love
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Re: repeating drop
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:02:55 PM AEST
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Hmmmmm..... the title.... makes me wonder if you're speaking for another. But regardless of who it is... it's another fabulous write. You again leave me with a lump in my throat and an ache that comes from knowing that the pain expressed is more than a poetic concoction.
As always, holder - thanks for sharing,
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Re: repeating drop
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 11:48:40 AM AEST
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wow, do I relate a beautiful yet very realistic and sad piece, very good...hope no one steals this one...
much love,
Dani |
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