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Excentricities inside a padded cell
Contributed by
Ripper_Something_Unusual
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Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 01:10:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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broken,
mispoken,
words flying across in your daydream,
theres blood,
then theres bile,
Do it all with a smile and be thankful that your victim isnt you,
Aborted and distorted,
with a grin,
You are a maniac,
They all agree,
Body count doubles (go away!)
Body count triples (go away!)
Go Away,
your place of recovery is inside yourself,
Its territory pre-marked,
happy pills change into sad pills,
They get you high but you stay on the ceiling,
its all your fault,
your victims turned you into a victim of society,
nothing more,
nothing less,
Youve got to escape (Youre here to stay!)
Dear God youve got to escape (Youre here to stay!)
Your here to stay,
relax.
After all, whats one more day?
Copyright ©
Ripper_Something_Unusual
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2004-07-13 13:10:22]
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Re: Excentricities inside a padded cell
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by Monkeybones99 on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 01:43:57 PM AEST
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| Just want to say great writing keep it up. |
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Re: Excentricities inside a padded cell
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:54:45 PM AEST
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this poem is really good...great job..keep it up
Lots of Love
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Re: Excentricities inside a padded cell
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by Petznick on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 11:43:36 PM AEST
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dark, disturbing, scary, but superb in all these areas. i like the viewpoint and the semi-surprise ending, great poem
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Re: Excentricities inside a padded cell
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 10:03:51 AM AEST
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Hmn. The ramblings of a psychotic murderer? You're adept at enlivening the darkness of one's mind with lines such as;
"your victims turned you into a victim of society,"
But I'm more at ease with a set theme, being led through a piece. Nice write nontheless, where you address me as a maniac.
Which I was, for a brief moment, inside this work.
Thanks again. |
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