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The Prince's Birth
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 11:29:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Terribly, tragically, horribly wrong
She’s been mistaken all along
Shouting into an echo chamber
Foolishly thinking that you’d save her
She’s throwing herself against a wall
Just won’t stop, ‘tho bruised and all
Pathetically, hopelessly, completely mad
She’s living in dreams that she once had
Thinking things that make no sense
She waits for yesterday to commence
She’s walking alone amidst the crowd
A mute she is, telling secrets aloud
Desperately, longingly, carrying on
She’s listening repeatedly to your song
Obnoxiously thinking that it’s alright
That she cries herself to sleep at night
She’s stealing moments of your time
And stuffing them, maybe, into a rhyme
Anxiously, fretfully, exceedingly crazed
She writes a new life into her day
Thinking, incredibly, that it might work
Her smile contorts to twisted smirk
As she writes away the you of this world
To give birth to The Prince - by Poet Girl
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2004-07-12 23:29:18]
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by Buggsy on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 12:10:46 AM AEST
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| Great write. Not sure if I understood it correctly but is it about someone who has had a life of abuse and deals with it by living in their dreams fooling themself by making everything seem alright? (I'm probably completely wrong). |
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by rhymeandreason on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 01:18:53 AM AEST
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Powerful write. The weaving of the anguish, and the dream sublime is remarkable as well as effective. I've re-read it three times already and I still find more meat on this bone i've yet to digest. Thank you. R&R
I read your re;re; to my re; and I missed this site very much. Other aspects of my life worked against my being here. It wasn't my choice. r&r |
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:17:55 AM AEST
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Wow! Why do I feel like this is a place I have been to? An awesome write.
Stitch |
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by emystar on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 09:48:35 PM AEST
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Very interesting thoughts.
huggs.
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by tifrob on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 12:42:04 AM AEST
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This is a neat poem. I love the smoothness + flow of the poem. Great piece of work.
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th September 2004 @ 08:28:50 AM AEST
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self delusions?
no matter how honest we are with others, we can still lie to ourselves. sometimes aware, sometimes unaware. We can only hope if someone shows us the truth, we use that information wisely. |
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 10:05:35 PM AEST
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Excellent writing, Snem. I love the analogies & metaphors in this poem. Excellent indeed.
Timber
(who also really likes your new avatar)
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Re: The Prince's Birth
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 10:08:33 PM AEST
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| And again...I feel I can relate to the thoughts in your poem, yet I definitely cannot express it such a unique or extraordinary way. |
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