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Hiding In Myself
Contributed by
blueheart
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Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 08:57:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Tainted humans fuel my fear,
Reclusive void drawing near,
Plunged into this emotional carousel,
Leaving society, now hiding in myself.
Assaulted by yells, fallen through cracks,
Clutched kindness yet it somehow attacks,
Trusted others but heart strings they sell,
Why would I need anyone else?
Jostling hands leave you in the ground,
Riding high, then 'friends' are found,
Deliberately secured in the blanket of me,
Guarding myself with invisibility.
Solitude is splendid, I dwell in peace,
Losing their presence leaves me released,
Intoverted so my heart won't cry,
Hiding in myself to keep alive.
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:00:32 PM AEST
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This is rather sad. But very well written. Excellent job.
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by TheVoice on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:05:38 PM AEST
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very powerful piece
the voice
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:05:58 PM AEST
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| i L O V V V E D this!!! it was awesome! you did such a BRILLANT job |
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 09:24:37 PM AEST
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This is a very emotional write, but more, its so incredibly well phrased. Your writes have become so fine tuned.
Very well done
Roses
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by Justalady on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 10:36:46 PM AEST
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Deliberately secured in the blanket of me,
Guarding myself with invisibility
Great expression indeed of the struggle within one's self. June |
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 10:44:49 PM AEST
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This has strength and power and great structure. I have to second all the comments above. You did yourself proud with this piece.
Rita |
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by silent_wolf_tear on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 11:17:46 PM AEST
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This was a great write to read very well written good job and thanks for sharing it
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 12:16:07 AM AEST
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| very impressive..solitude is splendid and this poem also..:-) venkat |
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 05:47:51 AM AEST
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this is brilliant!
it's the best poem i've read on herefor quite a while.
i know just how you feel.
even though it's a sad topic you've expressed it with a beautiful flow.
it's a big 5/5! |
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 05:05:12 PM AEST
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Hanna........this is marvelous!
There's nothing wrong with your attitude, saves you from many a plight. I've been know to take the very same flight!
Our souls can take so much torture......then it's time to do something drastic. Sometimes I hide in a big balloon of plastic! I can see out but no one else see in!
You are wise beyond your years, Hanna......hang in there, but continue to be wise.....don't let them hurt you anymore, hiding is where you protection lies!
Wonderful wordology! Great Poem....Great Wisdom too!
Poetic hugs
I love you
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Re: Hiding In Myself
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:00:20 AM AEST
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This is an exceptional piece! Chock full of awareness and beautiful expression! Unique and amazing. I am seriously impressed by this!
Incredibly well done!
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