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The End of the Affair
Contributed by
overstated
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Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 01:42:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Silky stars melting in the background
This red car’s been running for too long without petrol
The trees have been peeling from the sides
As the wheels spin forwards
The driver looks back
The dark blue light inside the cherry vehicle
Is subverted by the brash headlights
Dashboard tears and a woman talking on the radio
About her fears
Moths hug the outside lights
Feeding on the energy of the night
The car bounces on down a hill
Everywhere’s empty or asleep
Except this crimson combat car
As it races on like a ship
That ignores a lighthouse
Like a bull gaining speed
A target to hit and a red mist to feed
The car rages on into a cushion of trees
Into its destiny it has its reasons
As it splashes in flames
The scarlet car turns to a ginger scar
Bounded beyond control
Just like the man who flew into the sky
Too damaged to stay
Too damaged to just cry
The man flew a mile high
As he ended the affair
Putting a hole into his lovers heart
As he flies he whispers ‘now we can never be apart…’
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Re: The End of the Affair
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by pixie on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 01:43:28 PM AEST
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very sad, and very beautiful
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Re: The End of the Affair
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by carmen_queasy on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 11:48:56 AM AEST
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| Amazing. |
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Re: The End of the Affair
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by PumpkinPie on
Sunday, 15th August 2004 @ 02:28:38 PM AEST
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Oh wow,the imagery in this piece was powerful.I felt as though I was a witness to the whole scene.What a sad ending though,
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Re: The End of the Affair
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 11:50:38 PM AEST
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Wow....great imagery here..loved this...
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Re: The End of the Affair
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 03:57:32 PM AEST
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Metaphore colour and light. Bravo. This is the stuff of poetry. I really liked this line "The scarlet car turns to a ginger scar" It kinda has a Romeo and Juliet feel sorta.
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