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Prelude To Soul-Searching
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 12:15:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I see now there's no place left for dreams
As all we've fought for has exploded at the seams
Will we hold steadfast in the face of the enemy?
Or will we squander what little is left of our sanity?
Safety has deserted me beyond my reach
Mother, when will you begin to practice what you preach?!
It seems like those who fight never grow ale
But I don't want to live in darkness and stay pale
Will we ever step down away from vanity?
Or will we stay encompassed in the gift of our profanity?
I keep asking though I know the won't be any answes
Deep inside I feel the rupture of fading sensors
Deserting all I thought I had known
I walk into the unknown....
Fear a silent man for he has lips like a drum.
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 12:25:28 AM AEST (User
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Awesome write!
huggs,
emy
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Thunderwolf on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 12:59:16 AM AEST (User
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A thought provoking write.
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 01:17:34 AM AEST (User
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AV, this is a tremendous write. I don't see any messiness but I do see a strong and powerful piece of work. Thank you for sharing this.
Rita |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 05:33:00 AM AEST (User
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great write..... excellent
pixie xx |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 09:38:08 PM AEST (User
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Ave, glad to see a new one.
You've laid out the brilliantly posed questions.
And I'm sure you do have the answers worked out somewhere within your mind.
Great write. |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by arden on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 10:31:43 PM AEST (User
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Avarice this was awesome.
your rhyme was flawless. great use of words. i love this poem. very good.
5 stars.
Arden |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Wednesday, 14th July 2004 @ 01:57:24 AM AEST (User
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Awesome and beautiful...it is also thought provoking.. :-) venkat |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 12:56:43 PM AEST (User
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Well, i wouldnt say this was messy...
but it is beautiful and thought provoking.
A brilliant write.
I am still, as always, in awe of your writing.
Phil |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 04:08:38 AM AEST (User
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Sheer brilliance..... your work astounds me..... Great poem!!!!! |
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Re: Prelude To Soul-Searching
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 01:26:03 AM AEST (User
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It seems cohesive enough to me, but what do I know?! Anway, "I feel the rupture of fading sensors" is captivating phrasing. Wonderful write! Cheers! |
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