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River and Stone
Contributed by
Ryoko
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Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 02:04:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Within the dome of society,
All i can do is watch onwards,
Forwards, backwards, still,
Which one do u think i am?
Watching air float away,
can this be happening to you,
Is it something you would always have,
or does it come and go with coincidence?
Are you listening to me,
Or am i the faint voice of truth,
Will it always build up in you,
Will you become false?
Im wondering if your the same,
Careful with your stone,
Does it happen to you at your best?
Hn, why am i asking, you dont know!
Maybe, you'll get it when your 18,
When you realise your faith's truth has gone,
Do you think im lying now,
Or is it nothing but misguidance?
By then i wont be confused,
between the river and the rock,
will you be there? on your own?
I'm pretty sure you will be
So noble and smart in the body,
Surrounded by the flesh more than once,
do i mock you?
Do i know you as much as i think?
Yes all is true of what i've said,
but you believe in the bad ending,
will it keep going?
Only you can tell me
But you won't, for your sins you wont,
Because you know im right somewhere,
How do i know this you ask?
'i know you' i answer
Copyright ©
Ryoko
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2004-07-09 14:04:24]
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Re: River and Stone
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by loopylou on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 02:08:38 PM AEST
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| i really liked the ending. a very smart poem. lots and lots of big words. some may say a educational experiance. Lou |
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Re: River and Stone
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by shanny0069 on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 03:28:48 PM AEST
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| this is really good..... |
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Re: River and Stone
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by Kie on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:04:30 PM AEST
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I agree it is good. I liked the title as well.
It was like reading an insider's view.
Kie |
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Re: River and Stone
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by OMEGA_ on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 09:34:27 AM AEST
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| well done |
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Re: River and Stone
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by bobbyclay56 on
Sunday, 23rd October 2011 @ 08:55:42 AM AEST
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| Your poem is like your title in some places its deep and in some places it shallow but being a moving little poems evens it all out. |
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